30 September 2015, Writing
Ideas - New Novel, part 538, Explanation Historical Speech Language
and Style Q and A
Announcement: Delay, my new novels can be seen on the internet, but the publisher
has delayed all their fiction output due to the economy. I'll keep you
informed. More information can be found at www.ancientlight.com.
Check out my novels--I think you'll really enjoy them.
Introduction: I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon.
This was my 21st novel and through this blog, I gave you the entire novel in
installments that included commentary on the writing. In the commentary, in
addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel
was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and
tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes. You can look back through this
blog and read the entire novel beginning with http://www.pilotlion.blogspot.com/2010/10/new-novel-part-3-girl-and-demon.html.
I'm using this novel as an example
of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published. I'll
keep you informed along the way.
Today's Blog: To see the steps in the publication process, visit my
writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select "production
schedule," you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.
The four plus one basic rules I
employ when writing:
1. Don't confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the
writing.
4. Don't show (or tell) everything.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of
your writing.
All novels have five discrete parts:
1. The initial scene (the
beginning)
2. The rising action
3. The climax
4. The falling action
5. The dénouement
The theme statement
of my 26th novel, working title, Shape, is
this: Mrs. Lyons captures a shape-shifting girl in her pantry
and rehabilitates her.
Here is the cover proposal for Lilly:
Enchantment and the Computer. Lilly is my 24th novel.
The most important scene in any
novel is the initial scene, but eventually, you have to move to the rising
action. I've started writing Shape.
I'm
an advocate of using the/a scene input/output method to drive the rising
action--in fact, to write any novel.
Scene development:
1. Scene input (easy)
2. Scene output (a little
harder)
3. Scene setting (basic stuff)
4. Creativity (creative
elements of the scene)
5. Tension (development of
creative elements to build excitement)
6. Release (climax of creative
elements)
I can immediately discern three ways
to invoke creativity:
1. History extrapolation
2. Technological extrapolation
3. Intellectual
extrapolation
Creativity is like
an extrapolation of what has been. It is a reflection of something
new created with ties to the history, science, and logic (the
intellect). Creativity requires consuming, thinking, and producing.
One of my blog readers posed these
questions. I'll use the next few weeks to answer them.
5. Language and style
6. Verbal, gesture, action
7. Words employed
8. Sentence length
9. Complexity
10. Type of grammar
11. Diction
12. Field of reference or
allusion
13. Tone
14. Mannerism suggest by
speech
15. Style
16. Distinct manner of writing
or speaking you employ, and why (like Pinter's style includes gaps, silences,
non-sequitors, and fragments while Chekhov's includes 'apparent'
inconclusiveness).
Moving on to 5. 5.
Language and style
Short digression: I'm writing
from Anchorage Alaska.
To write in an older person's speech
pattern, I just have to use standard English and then use the proper decade's
or period's standard English and idioms. Here's an example of a
greeting. The greetings are the best place to show differences.
Mrs. Lyons opened the door,
"Good afternoon, Constable Wyght."
"Afternoon, Mrs. Lyons.
May I inquire about Essie's whereabouts?"
"She is right here with
me." Mrs. Lyons called out of the room, "Essie, dear, come
greet Constable Wyght."
Essie entered the foyer. She
blinked then gave a slight curtsy, "Hello, Constable. How are
you?"
"Very well, thank you," he
smiled.
I left up the example because I want
to show the differences in the speech rhythms and patterns. The first is Mrs. Lyons initial
greeting. A young person might say “hello”
or “hi.” A cowboy or a person from the
Western US might say howdy. A person
from modern Britain might say “afternoon, constable.” You definitely don’t want to move out of
standard English—so your urban person should not make a greeting like “yo” or “wasup.” Bringing colloquial English into the writing
will simply date it.
Mrs. Lyons says “good afternoon” and
directly addresses her visitor. This is
a common older and more formal greeting.
Most readers should catch this.
Mrs. Lyons is obviously an older person from a formal background. The response from the constable is a
shortened greeting “afternoon” and a direct address. This places the constable in a less formal category. A more formal greeting and response from both
Mrs. Lyons and the constable would be, “good afternoon, Constable Wyght. How do you do?” This would definitely place them both in the
early 20th Century and very formal.
They are friends so the more formal address is not necessary to place
them and the novel is set in the early 21st Century, so there is no
need for that degree of formality. All
of this is standard English and will stand the test of time.
If you note the rhythm of the speech—it
is a very British and somewhat formal way of speaking. None of it is odd or unusual, the speech just
fits the speakers. So, Constable Wyght’s
question is professional, formal, and place setting. He could ask, “Where is Essie?” or “I need to
know where Essie is?” or “Could you tell me were Essie is?” or “May I see
Essie?” Each of these questions place
the speaker in a different place, time, and formality. He could also demand, “Let me see Essie” or “I
need to see Essie.”
What I want you to note is the
words, their patterns and rhythm, and their containers (tags and IDs) all
matter and reflect the age, place, time, education, culture etc. of your
characters.
More
tomorrow.
For more information, you can visit my author site http://www.ldalford.com/, and my individual novel websites:
For more information, you can visit my author site http://www.ldalford.com/, and my individual novel websites:
http://www.ancientlight.com/
http://www.aegyptnovel.com/
http://www.centurionnovel.com
http://www.thesecondmission.com/
http://www.theendofhonor.com/
http://www.thefoxshonor.com
http://www.aseasonofhonor.com
http://www.aegyptnovel.com/
http://www.centurionnovel.com
http://www.thesecondmission.com/
http://www.theendofhonor.com/
http://www.thefoxshonor.com
http://www.aseasonofhonor.com
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