12 July 2016, Writing Ideas
- New Novel, part 823, more Dénouement
Announcement: Delay, my new novels can be seen on the internet, but the publisher
has delayed all their fiction output due to the economy. I'll keep you
informed. More information can be found at www.ancientlight.com. Check out my novels--I think you'll really enjoy
them.
Introduction: I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon.
This was my 21st novel and through this blog, I gave you the entire novel in
installments that included commentary on the writing. In the commentary, in
addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel
was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and
tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes. You can look back through this
blog and read the entire novel beginning with http://www.pilotlion.blogspot.com/2010/10/new-novel-part-3-girl-and-demon.html.
I'm using this novel as an example
of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published. I'll
keep you informed along the way.
Today's Blog: To see the steps in the publication process, visit my
writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select "production
schedule," you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.
The four plus one basic rules I
employ when writing:
1. Don't confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the
writing.
4. Don't show (or tell) everything.
4a. Show what can be seen, heard, felt, smelled, and tasted on the stage
of the novel.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your writing.
All novels have five discrete parts:
1. The initial scene (the
beginning)
2. The rising action
3. The climax
4. The falling action
5. The dénouement
The theme statement
of my 26th novel, working title, Shape, proposed
title, Essie: Enchantment and the Aos Si,
is this: Mrs. Lyons captures a shape-shifting girl in her pantry
and rehabilitates her.
I
finished writing my 27th novel, working title, Claire, potential
title Sorcha: Enchantment and the Curse. This might need some tweaking. The theme statement is: Claire (Sorcha) Davis
accepts Shiggy, a dangerous screw-up, into her Stela branch of the organization
and rehabilitates her.
Here is the cover proposal for Essie:
Enchantment and the Aos Si. Essie is my 26th novel.
The most important scene in any
novel is the initial scene, but eventually, you have to move to the rising
action. I started writing my 28th novel, working title Red Sonja.
I'm
an advocate of using the/a scene input/output method to drive the rising
action--in fact, to write any novel.
Scene development:
1. Scene input (easy)
2. Scene output (a little
harder)
3. Scene setting (basic stuff)
4. Creativity (creative
elements of the scene)
5. Tension (development of
creative elements to build excitement)
6. Release (climax of creative
elements)
How to begin a novel. Number one thought, we need an entertaining
idea. I usually encapsulate such an idea
with a theme statement. Since I’m
writing a new novel, we need a new theme statement. Here is an initial cut.
Red Sonja, a Soviet spy, infiltrates
the X-plane programs at Edwards AFB as a test pilot’s administrative clerk,
learns about freedom, and is redeemed.
So here is a longer dénouement. This is from Aksinya.
Aksinya swung off
the streetcar and skipped down the Union
Park in Boston .
She wore a tweed dress and a jaunty tweed cap. She carried a leather briefcase her
Dobrushushka had given her at her graduation only a month before. It reminded her of the briefcase she owned
when she attended Sacré Coeur, but she never remembered carrying that one
herself. She was very proud of this
briefcase—it held her diploma in linguistics and teaching from Radcliffe College .
Radcliffe was one of the few woman’s college she could attend since all
the Catholic ones excluded her. She had
mostly escaped notoriety, but still she and Dobrushushka attended a very small
Russian Orthodox Church near his office.
Aksinya spotted Saint John the Baptizer
Greek Orthodox Church across the street and started counting the buildings down
from it.
She and Dobrushin
had been in Boston
for a little over four years. They were
delightful years. She already wondered
what she would do to seduce him tonight—it had been two days already since the
last time. He was already a partner at
the law firm. Everyone in the firm knew
he was married, but Aksinya rarely showed her face there. Dobrushushka begged off officially because of
her schooling. That was a good thing,
she didn’t need notoriety. She didn’t
want her Dobrushushka to lose this job.
Aksinya halted
when her counting reached the correct house number and glanced at the
building. She stopped skipping and walked
carefully up the stairs in front. The
sign was right beside the door: Sacred Heart of Christ, Russian Orthodox
Seminary for Young Women and Girls.”
Aksinya
smiled. That sounded like just the place
for her. All the other schools where she
applied to teach mistook her for a student.
None of them had called her back.
She luckily heard about this place from a friend at their Ecclesia.
Aksinya pulled the
bell. After a couple of minutes a
matronly woman dressed as a chamber maid answered the door. She was pleasant looking. Aksinya smiled and announced in English, “I
am Mrs. Aksinya Andreiovna Lopuhin.”
The maid responded
in broken English, “This is a Russian academy, are you certain you are at the
right place? We don’t accept married
students.”
Aksinya changed to
Russian, “I am here to apply for the position of English and linguistics
teacher. You posted it with the Russian
exchange office.”
“Yes, so we
did.” The woman frowned and looked
Aksinya up and down.
“Is there a
problem?”
“None at
all.” The woman’s tone of voice said
there was. “I’ll take you to see the
headmistress. She is also the wife of
the owner of this school.”
The building was
similar to many of the row houses Aksinya was familiar with in Boston .
The foyer wasn’t large. It opened
to a stairway that led up into the building and a hall that led to the rear. A parlor was on the right and a classroom on
the left. Aksinya could hear the teacher
lecturing through the closed door.
The maid didn’t
lead Aksinya into the parlor or upstairs but rather headed down the hall on the
first floor. They passed a second and a
third classroom on the left and right and finally arrived at a large dining
room and kitchen. They were also on the
left. On the right was a door labeled
Office of the Headmistress. The door was
closed. Outside the door sat four
hardback chairs in a row. A girl of
about twelve slumped in one of the seats.
She didn’t seem very happy.
The maid turned a
stern look at the girl then pointed to the seats. Aksinya sat next to the girl. The maid knocked at the office, entered and
closed the door behind her. She exited
just a moment later, “The headmistress will call for you in a moment.”
Aksinya answered
“Thank you.”
The girl beside
her stared at Aksinya.
Aksinya stared
back, “I’m Aksinya Andreiovna Lopuhin, and you are?”
The girl answered,
“I’m Anastasiya, but everyone calls me Stacy.”
Her Russian was from Moscow ,
but the name Stacy was said purely in English.
Aksinya laughed,
“Do you speak English?”
“Not well. We’re supposed to learn it here.”
“Are you?”
“Too well.”
“What’s that
supposed to mean?”
“My brother taught
me some words and the Sister didn’t like me to say them at all.”
“What were the
words?”
Stacy motioned for
Aksinya to lower her head a little and whispered into her ear.
Aksinya blushed,
“Is that why you are here to speak to the headmistress?”
Stacy nodded
woefully.
“You have a Nun
teaching here?”
“Yes, she is
Orthodox but not from Russia .”
“What does she
teach?”
“English, German,
and French, but mostly German.”
“I see.”
The girl, Stacy
asked, “Are you going to go to school here?
Where are your mother and father?”
Aksinya laughed,
“I’m applying to be a teacher here.”
The girl’s eyes
widened, “You look so young.”
“I’m married,”
Aksinya held out her right hand.
Stacy admired
Aksinya’s plain golden ring, “Mother told me they married young in the old
country. Just how old are you?”
Aksinya laughed
again, “I’m twenty-three. I just
graduated from Radcliffe.”
“Do you like
school that much?”
“Yes, I like it
very much. I never was able to go when I
was young.”
“You’d hate it if
you were my age.”
“Why is that?”
Stacy held out her
red hand, “Sister already used her ruler on my hand, and now I have to speak to
the headmistress. If she tells my
mother, I’ll get the strap for sure.”
“Perhaps you
should tell the headmistress you didn’t know what the words meant and beg her
forgiveness.”
“I truly didn’t
know what the words were, and I still don’t know what they mean.”
“Then tell her
that.”
“Sister wouldn’t
listen.”
“Sometimes they
are like that.”
The door cracked
open, and a call came from inside the office.
It was Russian accented English and sounded very pleasant, “Miss Anastasiya
please come inside.” To Aksinya, the
voice seemed slightly familiar.
As Stacy passed
Aksinya, she whispered in Russian, “Don’t let her voice fool you, she is quite
strict.”
Aksinya nodded.
After a few
minutes, Stacy exited the office. She
held her features set in a look of contrition.
The moment the door closed, she gave a very American, thumbs up to
Aksinya, and mouthed, “It worked.” Then
louder she said, “I hope you do teach here.”
She skipped back down the hall to her class.
The door opened a
crack, “Mrs. Aksinya Andreiovna
Lopuhin, please enter.”
Aksinya stood and
entered the office. The headmistress had
her back to Aksinya and walked back to her desk. The woman seemed young. Very young for a headmistress. One shoulder drooped a little lower than the
other, but her back was ramrod straight and her clothing was very fine, much
finer than Aksinya’s.
The desk was large
and filled one end of the room. The
office was rather deep and had a fireplace on the left wall. Some padded chairs and a simple tea table
were arranged before the fireplace. An
unpadded chair sat before the desk.
Without turning, the headmistress pointed to that chair. Aksinya stood beside it and waited for the
headmistress to sit.
The moment the
headmistress turned, Aksinya dropped her briefcase. Her mouth fell open. She couldn’t speak.
The woman before
her gave a cry, “Princess Aksinya.” She
rushed around the desk and embraced her.
Aksinya couldn’t
get her breath she couldn’t speak.
Finally, she threw her arms around the headmistress and exclaimed, “Lady
Natalya.”
Natalya buried her
face in Aksinya’s thick braided hair and blubbered. They stood together for a long time without
saying anything. Finally, Natalya spoke,
“I thought I would never see you again, Princess.”
Aksinya kissed her
cheeks, “Dear Lady Natalya, I would never have guessed I would find you here. Is Herr von Taaffe with you?”
Natalya gave a
laugh, “I am Mrs. Natalya Alexandrovna
von Taaffe, though not called a Lady anymore.
And you?”
“Father Dobrushin married me although he is
not a priest anymore, and I am no longer a Princess.”
Natalya’s moist eyes held Aksinya’s, “You
will always be a Princess. My lady’s
maid told me you were looking for a job.”
“Please, Lady Natalya, I’m certain you would
not wish to have me around you all the time.
I know I will bring back terrible memories to you.”
“You don’t understand at all Princess. You are the reason I am here today. Wait with me for a while. Let me hear all that has happened to you since
we parted, then we will have luncheon with Sister Margarethe, and we will
discuss your teaching work in my school.”
“Sister Margarethe is also here?”
“Herr von Taaffe retained her as our
housekeeper. She converted to Russian
Orthodox and entered an order in the United States . Our school is loosely affiliated with Saint John’s .” Natalya held Aksinya at arms length and
looked her over, “Dear friend, we have so much to talk about and so much to
share. I do love you, Princess. I want you to remain with us forever.”
“In spite of everything that happened?”
“Because of
everything that happened before. That
time marked the end of a horrible and wonderful period, yet redemption came to
you, to me.” She held Aksinya close, “I
could not bear to lose you again, Aksinya.
You redeemed me, the first of many.
You shall redeem many more. God
exceeded our expectations in spite of what we had done.”
At the end of the falling action,
Dobrushin told Aksinya they would go to the United States. So they then to the United States. They went to Boston. Some might consider this an epilogue, but it
is properly a dénouement. Like I said, I
don’t like epilogues although you might get away with one.
The connection of the dénouement to
the falling action is where Dobrushin said they would go. Also Natalya told Aksinya that she and Herr
von Taaffe would leave Austria. Boston
was a popular place for the Orthodox to come in the USA. Dobrushin continued working with emigrants—that
was his job as a priest. We knew
Dobrushin was pressing Aksinya to continue her education. We also knew that Aksinya was excluded from
any Catholic university or organization.
We catch up with Aksinya in Boston.
She’s finished her university, and she is looking for a job. You know why she is having a problem finding a
job.
The kicker is meeting Natalya and
the information about Sister Margaretha.
This closes the curtain on the novel, yet leaves the reader with
something to think about. I think every
novel should end with some memorable quote—so I make up my own based on the
theme of the novel.
To lay it out. Aksinya is a novel about Aksinya’s
redemption. She could never imagine redeeming
anyone else. Natalya leaves Aksinya and
the reader with something important to think about.
More tomorrow.
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http://www.aegyptnovel.com/
http://www.centurionnovel.com
http://www.thesecondmission.com/
http://www.theendofhonor.com/
http://www.thefoxshonor.com
http://www.aseasonofhonor.com
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