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Writing - part xx344 Writing a Novel, the Plot of Lord of the Flies

11 September 2020, Writing - part xx344 Writing a Novel, the Plot of Lord of the Flies

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Introduction: I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon. This was my 21st novel and through this blog, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing. In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes. You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel beginning with
I’m using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published. I’ll keep you informed along the way.
Today’s Blog: To see the steps in the publication process, visit my writing websites
The four plus one basic rules I employ when writing:
1. Don’t confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the writing.
4. Don’t show (or tell) everything.
     4a. Show what can be seen, heard, felt, smelled, and tasted on the stage of the novel.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your writing.
These are the steps I use to write a novel including the five discrete parts of a novel:

1.      Design the initial scene
2.      Develop a theme statement (initial setting, protagonist, protagonist’s helper or antagonist, action statement)
a.       Research as required
b.      Develop the initial setting
c.       Develop the characters
d.      Identify the telic flaw (internal and external)
3.      Write the initial scene (identify the output: implied setting, implied characters, implied action movement)
4.      Write the next scene(s) to the climax (rising action)
5.      Write the climax scene
6.      Write the falling action scene(s)
7.      Write the dénouement scene
I finished writing my 29th novel, working title, Detective, potential title Blue Rose: Enchantment and the Detective.  The theme statement is: Lady Azure Rose Wishart, the Chancellor of the Fae, supernatural detective, and all around dangerous girl, finds love, solves cases, breaks heads, and plays golf.  
Here is the cover proposal for Blue Rose: Enchantment and the Detective

Cover Proposal
The most important scene in any novel is the initial scene, but eventually, you have to move to the rising action. I am continuing to write on my 30th novel, working title Red Sonja.  I finished my 29th novel, working title Detective.  I’m planning to start on number 31, working title Shifter
How to begin a novel.  Number one thought, we need an entertaining idea.  I usually encapsulate such an idea with a theme statement.  Since I’m writing a new novel, we need a new theme statement.  Here is an initial cut.

For novel 30:  Red Sonja, a Soviet spy, infiltrates the X-plane programs at Edwards AFB as a test pilot’s administrative clerk, learns about freedom, and is redeemed.

For novel 31:  Deirdre and Sorcha are redirected to French finishing school where they discover difficult mysteries, people, and events. 

Here is the scene development outline:

1. Scene input (comes from the previous scene output or is an initial scene)
2. Write the scene setting (place, time, stuff, and characters)
3. Imagine the output, creative elements, plot, telic flaw resolution (climax) and develop the tension and release.
4. Write the scene using the output and creative elements to build the tension.
5. Write the release
6. Write the kicker
Today:  Why don’t we go back to the basics and just writing a novel?  I can tell you what I do, and show you how I go about putting a novel together.  We can start with developing an idea then move into the details of the writing. 

To start a novel, I picture an initial scene.  I may start from a protagonist or just launch into mental development of an initial scene.  I get the idea for an initial scene from all kinds of sources.  To help get the creative juices flowing, let’s look at the initial scene. 

1.      Meeting between the protagonist and the antagonist or the protagonist’s helper
2.      Action point in the plot
3.      Buildup to an exciting scene
4.      Indirect introduction of the protagonist

Ideas.  We need ideas.  Ideas allow us to figure out the protagonist and the telic flaw.  Ideas don’t come fully armed from the mind of Zeus.  We need to cultivate ideas. 

1.      Read novels. 
2.      Fill your mind with good stuff—basically the stuff you want to write about. 
3.      Figure out what will build ideas in your mind and what will kill ideas in your mind.
4.      Study.
5.      Teach. 
6.      Make the catharsis. 
7.      Write.

The development of ideas is based on study and research, but it is also based on creativity.  Creativity is the extrapolation of older ideas to form new ones or to present old ideas in a new form.  It is a reflection of something new created with ties to the history, science, and logic (the intellect).  Creativity requires consuming, thinking, and producing.

If we have filled our mind with all kinds of information and ideas, we are ready to become creative.  Creativity means the extrapolation of older ideas to form new ones or to present old ideas in a new form.  Literally, we are seeing the world in a new way, or actually, we are seeing some part of the world in a new way. 

I’ve worked through creativity and the protagonist.  The ultimate point is that if you properly develop your protagonist, you have created your novel.  This moves us on to plots and initial scenes.  As I noted, if you have a protagonist, you have a novel.  The reason is that a protagonist comes with a telic flaw, and a telic flaw provides a plot and theme.  If you have a protagonist, that gives you a telic flaw, a plot, and a theme.  I will also argue this gives you an initial scene as well. 

So, we worked extensively on the protagonist.  I gave you many examples great, bad, and average.  Most of these were from classics, but I also used my own novels and protagonists as examples.  Here’s my plan.

1.      The protagonist comes with a telic flaw – the telic flaw isn’t necessarily a flaw in the protagonist, but rather a flaw in the world of the protagonist that only the Romantic protagonist can resolve.
2.      The telic flaw determines the plot.
3.      The telic flaw determines the theme.
4.      The telic flaw and the protagonist determines the initial scene.
5.      The protagonist and the telic flaw determines the initial setting.
6.      Plot examples from great classic plots.
7.      Plot examples from mediocre classic plots.
8.      Plot examples from my novels.
9.      Creativity and the telic flaw and plots.
10.  Writer’s block as a problem of continuing the plot.

Every great or good protagonist comes with their own telic flaw.  I showed how this worked with my own writing and novels.  Let’s go over it in terms of the plot.

This is all about the telic flaw.  Every protagonist and every novel must come with a telic flaw.  They are the same telic flaw.  That telic flaw can be external, internal or both.

We found that a self-discovery telic flaw or a personal success telic flaw can potentially take a generic plot.  We should be able to get an idea for the plot purely from the protagonist, telic flaw and setting.  All of these are interlaced and bring us our plot.

For a great plot, the resolution of the telic flaw has to be a surprise to the protagonist and to the reader.  This is both the measure and the goal.  As I noted before, for a great plot, the author needs to make the telic flaw resolution appear to be impossible, but then it happens.  There is much more to this.  Here’s the list of plots I’ve looked at already:

1.      Redemption
2.      Detective or mystery
3.      Messiah
4.      End of the World
5.      War
6.      Anti-war
7.      Revenge or vengeance
8.      Revelation
9.      Zero to hero

Here is the list of classics that everyone should read.  What I want to do is evaluate this list for the plots. 

This is the plan.  Let’s look at each novel and try to pull out the plot types, the telic flaw, and the theme of the novel. The ultimate point is we can glean plot ideas and types to add to our list.  Part of this evaluation, we can try to identify the zero and the hero of the protagonist.  All this might help us define plots and perhaps help us to develop plots for our own novels.  This is kind of like looking at art as an artist and figuring out what makes a picture successful.

1 Pride and Prejudice - Jane Austen
2 The Lord of the Rings - JRR Tolkien
3 Jane Eyre - Charlotte Bronte
4 Dandelion Wine – Ray Bradbury – Best modern novel in English.  
5 To Kill a Mockingbird - Harper Lee
6 The Bible – Most important book to understand Western culture.
7 Wuthering Heights - Emily Bronte
8 Nineteen Eighty Four - George Orwell
9 We The Living – Ayn Rand
10 Great Expectations - Charles Dickens

11 Little Women - Louisa M Alcott
12 Tess of the D’Urbervilles - Thomas Hardy
13 Dune – Frank Herbert
14 Complete Works of Shakespeare – better to see as plays
15 Rebecca - Daphne Du Maurier
16 The Hobbit - JRR Tolkien
17 The Cadwal Chronicles – Jack Vance
18 Catcher in the Rye - JD Salinger
19 The Green Pearl Novels – Jack Vance
20 Middlemarch - George Eliot

21 Gone With the Wind - Margaret Mitchel
22 The Great Gatsby - F Scott Fitzgerald
23 Bleak House - Charles Dickens
24 War and Peace - Leo Tolstoy
25 Starship Troopers – Robert Heinlein
27 Crime and Punishment - Fyodor Dostoyevsky
28 Grapes of Wrath - John Steinbeck
29 Alice in Wonderland - Lewis Carroll
30 The Wind in the Willows - Kenneth Grahame

31 Anna Karenina - Leo Tolstoy
32 David Copperfield - Charles Dickens 
33 Chronicles of Narnia - CS Lewis
34 Emma -Jane Austen
35 Persuasion - Jane Austen
36 Atlas Shrugged – Ayn Rand
37 The Tale of Genji - Murasaki Shikibu
38 The House of Seven Gables - Nathaniel Hawthorne
39 The Scarlet Letter - Nathaniel Hawthorne
40 Winnie the Pooh - AA Milne

41 Animal Farm - George Orwell
42 Dracula – Bram Stoker
43 Till We Have Faces – C.S. Lewis
44 Le Morte D'Arthur - Thomas Malory
45 The Woman in White - Wilkie Collins
46 Anne of Green Gables - LM Montgomery
47 Far From The Madding Crowd - Thomas Hardy
48 Ivanhoe – Sir Walter Scott
49 Lord of the Flies - William Golding
50 The Fountainhead – Ayn Rand

51 What Katy Did - Sarah Chauncey Woolsey under her pen name Susan Coolidge
52 A Little Princess - Frances Hodgson Burnett
53 The Secret Garden - Frances Hodgson Burnett
54 Sense and Sensibility - Jane Austen
55 The Jungle Book - Rudyard Kipling
56 Kim - Rudyard Kipling
57 A Tale Of Two Cities - Charles Dickens
58 Brave New World - Aldous Huxley
59 Beowulf – Unknown
60 The Odyssey – Homer

61 Of Mice and Men - John Steinbeck
62 Lolita - Vladimir Nabokov
63 The Moonstone - Wilkie Collins
64 The Maltese Falcon - Dashiell Hammett
65 Count of Monte Cristo - Alexandre Dumas
66 As I Lay Dying - William Faulkner
67 Jude the Obscure - Thomas Hardy
68 Robinson Caruso – Daniel Defoe
69 The Red Badge of Courage - Stephen Crane
70 Moby Dick - Herman Melville

71 Oliver Twist - Charles Dickens
72 Don Quixote - Miguel De Cervantes
73 Heidi – Johanna Spyri
74 Hans Brinker - Mary Mapes Dodge
75 Ulysses - James Joyce
76 The Inferno – Dante
77 The Big Sky Country – Arlo Guthrie
78 Germinal - Emile Zola
79 Vanity Fair - William Makepeace Thackeray

80 The Black Arrow - Robert Louis Stevenson
81 A Christmas Carol - Charles Dickens
82 Treasure Island - Robert Louis Stevenson
83 The Gulag Archipelago - Aleksandr Solzhenitsyn
84 The Miser – George Elliot
85 Madame Bovary - Gustave Flaubert
86 For Whom the Bell Tolls – Ernest Hemmingway
87 Tarzan – Edger Rice Burroughs
88 The Death of Socrates – Plato
89 Adventures of Sherlock Holmes - Sir Arthur Conan Doyle
90 I, Robot - Isaac Asimov

91 Heart of Darkness - Joseph Conrad
92 The Little Prince - Antoine De Saint-Exupery
93 Huckleberry Fin – Mark Twain
94 Watership Down - Richard Adams
95 Gulliver’s Travels - Jonathan Swift
96 Matilda – Roald Dahl
97 The Three Musketeers - Alexandre Dumas
98 The Canterbury Tales - Geoffrey Chaucer
99 Charlie and the Chocolate Factory - Roald Dahl
100 Les Miserables - Victor Hugo

101 The Once and Future King – T.H. White
102 The Deerslayer – James Fenimore Cooper
103 The Black Book of Communism – Various
104 Ben Hur – Lew Wallace
105 The Robe – Lloyd C. Douglas
106 The Pilgrim’s Progress – John Bunyan
107 The Histories – Herodotus
108 Lives – Plutarch
109 The Call of the Wild – Jack London
110 Stand on Zanzibar – John Brunner

111 The Shockwave Rider – John Brunner
112 The Aeneid – Virgil

Lord of the Flies by William Golding is not really a classic.  In the main, it is the work of a deconstructionist ideology in a post Christin world.  It is a novel worth reading, but it is not that great a novel and it isn’t true.  The dystopian anarchy caused by youth and society is a popular plot and theme today, but no society has ever demonstrated this kind of nihilism or self-destruction based on the principles Golding presented in his novel.  Now, you might say—it could happen.  Certainly, bunny rabbits could grow horns and become demons, but they don’t an they never will.

Lord of the Flies is the exact opposite to Alice in Wonderland, The Wind in the Willows, or Whinny the Pooh.  These are far more entertaining novels and stories than Lord of the Flies.  So, to be clear.  Lord of the Flies does not represent human society, any human society.  It is as accurate and realistic as any of the popular and not as popular novels from that period and this century.  For example, 1984, The Hungry Games, The Maze Runner.  These are all dystopian novels of more or less entertaining structure that are about as real as Lord of the Flies.  Surely 1984 could happen, but it hasn’t.  It could happen in a totalitarian state, but Lord of the Flies happens in a completely base state of nature.  There is no there, there to cause the incidents driving the novel, and that’s where we need to go.

So, what are the plots?  There is a redemption plot, but it’s pretty buried.  Golding leave the reader with the sense that the educated and sane simply don’t need religion or God.  That’s the point of the beast and the Lord of the Flies as metaphors in the book.  These are all within the imagination of the boys and nothing else.  Golding set up an opposite to redemption plot.  We called this a curse plot before, we’ll go with that.

There are elements of mystery in the novel, but all these are put out to be false or trickery.  The beast is a dead aviator.  The Lord of the Flies is a pigs head on a stick.  There is no real mystery, just descent into savagery, but that was Golding’s point.  This is also a war plot.  The setting and the plot is about war.  There is a mixed allegory concerning the war—that is World War II.  In this regard the novel is one of the anti-war novels that came out of this period.  There were very few anti-war novels out of World War II—this is one of them.  Most of anti-war novels came about due to the Cold War. 

Lord of the Flies has an end of the world and a Messiah theme, but not really those plots.  They are more anti-Messiah.  There is pretty much any and all human faults and sins encompassed in the novel from murder and theft to vengeance and betrayal.  We’ll note those.  That’s because this is a novel intended to shock the placid and moral person.  It is a novel that tells you that underneath you are just like these boy, animals and inhuman.  There are no heroes in Lord of the Flies.  No achievement.  There is an achievement plot, but the boys don’t achieve anything except harm and death.  This is a tragedy in a comedy wrapper. 

We must add an article plot for the weapons, the eyeglasses, and the Lord of the Flies itself.  These are all things that drive the plot.  Traveling is how they arrived in their predicament. You might say there is some coming of age plot, but this is the opposite of such a plot.  In a coming of age plot, the protagonist is better off at the end, having learned something of value.  The boys don’t learn at all, they regress.

I will add that this is a totalitarian plot.  There is no government, but the government the boys set up is definitely totalitarian.  Definitely we have a psychological and a horror plot.  Golding’s purpose is to shock.  He is writing a novel like a shock artist, no art, just shock.  I added to the list of plots all the rest of the garbage plots at the end.  These are the dredges of human ideas and stories, but they pass for the modern.  If you notice, we find few of these until the Twentieth Century.  

Go ahead, read Lord of the Flies I wish I hadn’t.  Your children should not be reading this novel until they are in HS, and you need to tell them—it isn’t true.  It is totally made up.  In fact, when a group of boys were actually set in this precise circumstance, they did the opposite to the Lord of the Flies.  Just remember that.  Plus, none of Golding’s books are very entertaining nor realistic.  He is a shock artist, not an entertaining writer.

Here’s the list of plots.  I’m going to amend the list as we noted. 
1.      Redemption – 6i, 1e, 7, 3ei
2.      Detective or mystery – 21
3.      Messiah – 4
4.      End of the World - 1
5.      War – 9, 1
6.      Anti-war - 1
7.      Revenge or vengeance – 14, 2ie, 1e, 1
8.      Revelation – 16, 1e
9.      Zero to hero – 6
10.  Romance – 21, 1ie
11.  Achievement – 7e, 10ei, 9, 2i, 1
12.  Article – 1e, 9, 1
13.  Travel – 15, 1
14.  Coming of age – 13, 1ei
15.  Progress of technology – 2
16.  Discovery – 2ie, 12
17.  Rejected love (rejection) – 9, 1ei
18.  Miscommunication - 2
19.  Love triangle – 6
20.  Betrayal – 1i, 10, 1ie, 1
21.  Totalitarian – 1e, 3, 1
22.  Blood will out or fate – 12, 1i
23.  Psychological – 8, 1i, 1
24.  Horror – 4, 1
25.  Magic – 4
26.  Mistaken identity – 2, 1
27.  Money – 2e, 9
28.  Spoiled child – 1, 1
29.  Children – 2, 1
30.  Historical – 6
31.  Legal – 2
32.  Adultery – 8
33.  Illness – 3
34.  School – 3
35.  Self-discovery – 1i, 2
36.  Guilt or Crime – 7, 1
37.  Anti-hero – 3, 1
38.  Immorality – 3i, 1
39.  Proselytizing – 2, 1
40.  Satire – 3
41.  Reason – 3, 1ie
42.  Escape – 1ie, 1, 1
43.  Knowledge – 4
44.  Camaraderie – 3
45.  Parallel - 1
46.  Allegory – 4, 1
47.  Curse – 2, 1
48.  Insanity – 1, 1
49.  Fantasy world – 1, 1

Ralph is the protagonist of Lord of the Flies.  Piggy is the protagonist’s helper.  Ralph’s external telic flaw is escape.  His internal telic flaw is that he wishes to take care of the other boys.  He is pictured by Golding as the infernal stick in the mud who wants order and discipline.  The prefect of the boys or the girls lording goodness and proper authority over them. 

The external telic flaw is escape, but the internal telic flaw is achievement.  It is noteworthy, that although the boys do escape in the end, it was not their doing.  Ralph fails in his internal telic flaw as well.  The novel is a tragedy.  The problem with it as a tragedy is that it is fantasy.

It is a fantasy in the sense of the rabbit who ravages knights—there are just no such things.  In a classic tragedy, we have the failure of the protagonist to overcome the telic flaw.  Since Ralph was not like Alice, there was no way he could overcome his internal telic flaw. 

I recommend not using this novel as too much of an example for your writing.  This is a novel most people hate to read.  They know there is something wrong with it, but they just can’t put their finger on what is wrong.  It is usually given to children much too young for the ideas in it, and their teachers breathlessly hold it out as a classic like the really greats The Scarlet Letter or The House of Seven Gables.  God forbid a child learn about adultery and unwed motherhood but revel in children murdering other children.  In any case, I don’t think much of Lord of the Flies.  Not as a book or as a reflection of human nature.  It is fantasy.  If you like the allegory, go for it, but there are much better allegories—CS Lewis and Tolkien come to mind. 

In any case, I’ve looked at it.  It isn’t entertaining, to me.  And, I don’t think much of it.  

In the end, we can figure out what makes a work have a great plot, and apply this to our writing.     
Let’s start with the idea of an internal and external telic flaw.  Then let’s provide it a wrapper.  The wrapper is the plot.       
The beginning of creativity is study and effort.  We can use this to extrapolate to creativity.  In addition, we need to look at recording ideas and working with ideas.    
More tomorrow.

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