17 February 2021, Writing - part xx503 Writing a Novel, Examples of Big Talk
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Introduction: I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon.
This was my 21st novel and through this blog, I gave you the entire
novel in installments that included commentary on the writing. In the
commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained,
how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing
techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes. You can look back
through this blog and read the entire novel beginning with http://www.pilotlion.blogspot.com/2010/10/new-novel-part-3-girl-and-demon.html.
I’m using this novel as an example
of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published. I’ll
keep you informed along the way.
Today’s Blog: To see the steps in the publication process, visit my
writing websites http://www.sisteroflight.com/.
The four plus one basic rules I
employ when writing:
1. Don’t confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the
writing.
4. Don’t show (or tell) everything.
4a. Show what can be seen, heard, felt, smelled, and tasted on the stage
of the novel.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your writing.
These are the steps I use to write a
novel including the five discrete parts of a novel:
1.
Design the initial scene
2.
Develop a theme statement (initial
setting, protagonist, protagonist’s helper or antagonist, action statement)
a.
Research as required
b.
Develop the initial setting
c.
Develop the characters
d.
Identify the telic flaw (internal
and external)
3.
Write the initial scene (identify
the output: implied setting, implied characters, implied action movement)
4.
Write the next scene(s) to the
climax (rising action)
5.
Write the climax scene
6.
Write the falling action scene(s)
7.
Write the dénouement scene
I
finished writing my 29th novel, working title, Detective, potential
title Blue Rose: Enchantment and the Detective. The theme statement is: Lady Azure Rose
Wishart, the Chancellor of the Fae, supernatural detective, and all around
dangerous girl, finds love, solves cases, breaks heads, and plays golf.
Here is the cover proposal for Blue
Rose: Enchantment and the Detective.
The most important scene in any
novel is the initial scene, but eventually, you have to move to the rising
action. I am continuing to write on my 30th novel, working
title Red Sonja. I finished my 29th novel, working
title Detective. I’m planning to start on number 31, working
title Shifter.
How to begin a novel. Number one thought, we need an entertaining
idea. I usually encapsulate such an idea
with a theme statement. Since I’m
writing a new novel, we need a new theme statement. Here is an initial cut.
For novel 30: Red Sonja, a Soviet spy, infiltrates the
X-plane programs at Edwards AFB as a test pilot’s administrative clerk, learns
about freedom, and is redeemed.
For novel 31: Deirdre and Sorcha are redirected to French
finishing school where they discover difficult mysteries, people, and events.
Here
is the scene development outline:
1.
Scene input (comes from the previous scene output or is an initial scene)
2.
Write the scene setting (place, time, stuff, and characters)
3.
Imagine the output, creative elements, plot, telic flaw resolution (climax) and
develop the tension and release.
4.
Write the scene using the output and creative elements to build the tension.
5.
Write the release
6.
Write the kicker
Today: Why
don’t we go back to the basics and just writing a novel? I can tell you what I do, and show you how I
go about putting a novel together. We
can start with developing an idea then move into the details of the
writing.
To
start a novel, I picture an initial scene.
I may start from a protagonist or just launch into mental development of
an initial scene. I get the idea for an
initial scene from all kinds of sources.
To help get the creative juices flowing, let’s look at the initial
scene.
1.
Meeting between the protagonist and the antagonist or the
protagonist’s helper
2.
Action point in the plot
3.
Buildup to an exciting scene
4.
Indirect introduction of the
protagonist
Ideas. We need ideas. Ideas allow us to figure out the protagonist
and the telic flaw. Ideas don’t come
fully armed from the mind of Zeus. We
need to cultivate ideas.
1.
Read novels.
2.
Fill your mind with good
stuff—basically the stuff you want to write about.
3.
Figure out what will build ideas in
your mind and what will kill ideas in your mind.
4.
Study.
5.
Teach.
6.
Make the catharsis.
7.
Write.
The development of ideas is based on
study and research, but it is also based on creativity. Creativity is the extrapolation of older
ideas to form new ones or to present old ideas in a new form. It is a reflection of something new created
with ties to the history, science, and logic (the intellect). Creativity requires consuming, thinking, and
producing.
If we have filled our mind with all
kinds of information and ideas, we are ready to become creative. Creativity means the extrapolation of older
ideas to form new ones or to present old ideas in a new form. Literally, we are seeing the world in a new
way, or actually, we are seeing some part of the world in a new way.
I’ve worked through creativity and
the protagonist. The ultimate point is
that if you properly develop your protagonist, you have created your
novel. This moves us on to plots and
initial scenes. As I noted, if you have
a protagonist, you have a novel. The
reason is that a protagonist comes with a telic flaw, and a telic flaw provides
a plot and theme. If you have a
protagonist, that gives you a telic flaw, a plot, and a theme. I will also argue this gives you an initial
scene as well.
So, we worked extensively on the
protagonist. I gave you many examples
great, bad, and average. Most of these
were from classics, but I also used my own novels and protagonists as
examples. Here’s my plan.
1.
The protagonist comes with a telic flaw – the telic flaw
isn’t necessarily a flaw in the protagonist, but rather a flaw in the world of
the protagonist that only the Romantic protagonist can resolve.
2.
The telic flaw determines the plot.
3.
The telic flaw determines the theme.
4.
The telic flaw and the protagonist
determines the initial scene.
5.
The protagonist and the telic flaw determines
the initial setting.
6.
Plot examples from great classic
plots.
7.
Plot examples from mediocre classic plots.
8.
Plot examples from my novels.
9.
Creativity and the telic flaw and
plots.
10. Writer’s block as a problem of continuing the plot.
Every great or good protagonist
comes with their own telic flaw. I
showed how this worked with my own writing and novels. Let’s go over it in terms of the plot.
This is all about the telic
flaw. Every protagonist and every novel
must come with a telic flaw. They are the
same telic flaw. That telic flaw can be
external, internal or both.
We found that a self-discovery telic
flaw or a personal success telic flaw can potentially take a generic plot. We should be able to get an idea for the plot
purely from the protagonist, telic flaw and setting. All of these are interlaced and bring us our
plot.
For a great plot, the resolution of
the telic flaw has to be a surprise to the protagonist and to the reader. This is both the measure and the goal. As I noted before, for a great plot, the
author needs to make the telic flaw resolution appear to be impossible, but
then it happens. There is much more to
this. Here’s the list of plots I’ve
looked at already:
Here is the list of classics that
everyone should read. What I want to do
is evaluate this list for the plots.
1 Pride and Prejudice - Jane Austen
2 The Lord of the Rings - JRR
Tolkien
3 Jane Eyre - Charlotte Bronte
4 Dandelion Wine – Ray Bradbury –
Best modern novel in English.
5 To Kill a Mockingbird - Harper Lee
6 The Bible – Most important book to
understand Western culture.
7 Wuthering Heights - Emily Bronte
8 Nineteen Eighty Four - George
Orwell
9 We The Living – Ayn Rand
10 Great Expectations - Charles
Dickens
11 Little Women - Louisa M Alcott
12 Tess of the D’Urbervilles -
Thomas Hardy
13 Dune – Frank Herbert
14 Complete Works of Shakespeare –
better to see as plays
15 Rebecca - Daphne Du Maurier
16 The Hobbit - JRR Tolkien
17 The Cadwal Chronicles – Jack
Vance
18 Catcher in the Rye - JD Salinger
19 The Green Pearl Novels – Jack
Vance
20 Middlemarch - George Eliot
21 Gone With the Wind - Margaret
Mitchel
22 The Great Gatsby - F Scott
Fitzgerald
23 Bleak House - Charles Dickens
24 War and Peace - Leo Tolstoy
25 Starship Troopers – Robert
Heinlein
27 Crime and Punishment - Fyodor
Dostoyevsky
28 Grapes of Wrath - John Steinbeck
29 Alice in Wonderland - Lewis
Carroll
30 The Wind in the Willows - Kenneth
Grahame
31 Anna Karenina - Leo Tolstoy
32 David Copperfield - Charles
Dickens
33 Chronicles of Narnia - CS Lewis
34 Emma -Jane Austen
35 Persuasion - Jane Austen
36 Atlas Shrugged – Ayn Rand
37 The Tale of Genji - Murasaki
Shikibu
38 The House of Seven Gables
- Nathaniel Hawthorne
39 The Scarlet Letter
- Nathaniel Hawthorne
40 Winnie the Pooh - AA Milne
41 Animal Farm - George Orwell
42 Dracula – Bram Stoker
43 Till We Have Faces – C.S. Lewis
44 Le Morte D'Arthur - Thomas Malory
45 The Woman in White - Wilkie
Collins
46 Anne of Green Gables - LM
Montgomery
47 Far From The Madding Crowd -
Thomas Hardy
48 Ivanhoe – Sir Walter Scott
49 Lord of the Flies - William
Golding
50 The Fountainhead – Ayn Rand
51 What Katy Did - Sarah Chauncey
Woolsey under her pen name Susan Coolidge
52 A Little Princess - Frances
Hodgson Burnett
53 The Secret Garden - Frances
Hodgson Burnett
54 Sense and Sensibility - Jane
Austen
55 The Jungle Book - Rudyard Kipling
56 Kim - Rudyard Kipling
57 A Tale Of Two Cities - Charles
Dickens
58 Brave New World - Aldous Huxley
59 Beowulf – Unknown
60 The Odyssey – Homer
61 Of Mice and Men - John Steinbeck
62 Lolita - Vladimir Nabokov
63 The Moonstone - Wilkie Collins
64 The Maltese Falcon - Dashiell
Hammett
65 The Count of Monte Cristo -
Alexandre Dumas
66 As I Lay Dying - William Faulkner
67 Jude the Obscure - Thomas Hardy
68 Robinson Caruso – Daniel Defoe
69 The Red Badge of Courage -
Stephen Crane
70 Moby Dick - Herman Melville
71 Oliver Twist - Charles Dickens
72 Don Quixote - Miguel De Cervantes
73 Heidi – Johanna Spyri
74 Hans Brinker - Mary Mapes Dodge
75 Ulysses - James Joyce
76 The Inferno – Dante
77 The Big Sky – Arlo Guthrie
78 Germinal - Emile Zola
79 Vanity Fair - William Makepeace
Thackeray
80 The Black Arrow - Robert Louis
Stevenson
81 A Christmas Carol - Charles
Dickens
82 Treasure Island - Robert Louis
Stevenson
83 The Gulag Archipelago - Aleksandr
Solzhenitsyn
84 The Miser – George Eliot
85 Madame Bovary - Gustave Flaubert
86 For Whom the Bell Tolls – Ernest
Hemmingway
87 Tarzan – Edger Rice Burroughs
88 The Death of Socrates – Plato
89 Adventures of Sherlock Holmes -
Sir Arthur Conan Doyle
90 I, Robot - Isaac Asimov
91 Heart of Darkness - Joseph Conrad
92 The Little Prince - Antoine De
Saint-Exupery
93 Huckleberry Fin – Mark Twain
94 Watership Down - Richard Adams
95 Gulliver’s Travels - Jonathan
Swift
96 Matilda – Roald Dahl
97 The Three Musketeers - Alexandre
Dumas
98 The Canterbury Tales - Geoffrey
Chaucer
99 Charlie and the Chocolate Factory
- Roald Dahl
100 Les Miserables - Victor Hugo
101 The Once and Future King – T.H.
White
102 The Deerslayer – James Fenimore
Cooper
103 The Black Book of Communism –
Various
104 Ben Hur – Lew Wallace
105 The Robe – Lloyd C. Douglas
106 The Pilgrim’s Progress – John
Bunyan
107 The Histories – Herodotus
108 Lives – Plutarch
109 The Call of the Wild – Jack
London
110 Stand on Zanzibar – John Brunner
111 The Shockwave Rider – John
Brunner
112 The Aeneid – Virgil
This is what I did. I looked at each novel and pulled out the
plot types, the telic flaw, plotline, and the theme of the novel. I didn’t make a list of the themes, but we
identified the telic flaw as internal and external and by plot type. This generally gives the plotline.
We have a list of all the major
plots from this list of classics in literature.
The question is what can we do with it?
This is the first step in evaluating our results. I took a percentage of the results based on
the number of classics.
Modern writing is all about the
Romantic—both Romantic protagonists and Romantic plots. This is where we are going and this is the
focus of modern entertaining literature.
In the end, we can see there are
just a few baseline plots that are characteristics of most classics. These are the revelation, achievement, and
redemption plots. When I write these are
baseline, I mean that they are overall plots that might also have a different
plotline or other plots directly supporting them. Here’s what I mean exactly about each of
these plots:
Redemption: the protagonist must make an internal or
external change to resolve the telic flaw. This is the major style of most
great modern plots.
Revelation: the novel reveals portions of the life,
experiences, and ideas of the protagonist in a cohesive and serial fashion from
the initial scene to the climax and telic flaw resolution.
Achievement: the novel is characterized by a goal that the
protagonist must achieve to resolve the telic flaw.
I evaluated the list of plots and
categorized them according to the following scale:
Overall (o) – These
are the three overall plots we defined above: redemption, achievement, and
revelation.
Achievement (a)
– There are plots that fall under the idea of the achievement plot.
Quality (q) – These are plots based on a personal or character
quality.
Setting (s) – These are plots based on a setting.
Item (i) – These are plots based on an item.
All of the plots we looked at fall
into one of these five. Let’s do that:
Overall (o)
1.
Redemption (o) – 17i, 7e, 23ei, 8 –
49%
2.
Revelation (o) –2e, 64, 1i – 60%
3.
Achievement (o) – 16e, 19ei, 4i, 43
– 73%
Achievement (a)
1.
Detective or mystery (a) – 56, 1e –
51%
2.
Revenge or vengeance (a) –3ie, 3e,
45 – 46%
3.
Zero to hero (a) – 29 – 26%
4.
Romance (a) –1ie, 41 – 37%
5.
Coming of age (a) –1ei, 25 – 23%
6.
Progress of technology (a) – 6 – 5%
7.
Discovery (a) – 3ie, 57 – 54%
8.
Money (a) – 2e, 26 – 25%
9.
Spoiled child (a) – 7 – 6%
10. Legal (a) – 5 – 4%
11. Adultery (qa) – 18 – 16%
12. Self-discovery (a) – 3i, 12 – 13%
13. Guilt or Crime (a) – 32 – 29%
14. Proselytizing (a) – 4 – 4%
15. Reason (a) – 10, 1ie – 10%
16. Escape (a) – 1ie, 23
– 21%
17. Knowledge or Skill (a) – 26 – 23%
18. Secrets (a) – 21 – 19%
Quality (q)
1.
Messiah (q) – 10 – 9%
2.
Adultery (qa) – 18 – 16%
3.
Rejected love (rejection) (q) – 1ei,
21 – 20%
4.
Miscommunication (q) – 8 – 7%
5.
Love triangle (q) – 14 – 12%
6.
Betrayal (q) – 1i, 1ie, 46 – 43%
7.
Blood will out or fate (q) –1i, 1e,
26 – 25%
8.
Psychological (q) –1i, 45 – 41%
9.
Magic (q) – 8 – 7%
10. Mistaken identity (q) – 18 – 16%
11. Illness (q) – 1e, 19 – 18%
12. Anti-hero (q) – 6 – 5%
13. Immorality (q) – 3i, 8 – 10%
14. Satire (q) – 10 – 9%
15. Camaraderie (q) – 19 – 17%
16. Curse (q) – 4 – 4%
17. Insanity (q) – 8 – 7%
18. Mentor (q) – 12 – 11%
Setting (s)
1.
End of the World (s) – 3 – 3%
2.
War (s) – 20 – 18%
3.
Anti-war (s) –2 – 2%
4.
Travel (s) –1e, 62 – 56%
5.
Totalitarian (s) – 1e, 8 – 8%
6.
Horror (s) – 15 – 13%
7.
Children (s) – 24 – 21%
8.
Historical (s) – 19 – 17%
9.
School (s) – 11 – 10%
10. Parallel (s) – 4 – 4%
11. Allegory (s) – 10 – 9%
12. Fantasy world (s) – 5 – 4%
13. Prison (s) – 2 – 2%
Item (i)
1.
Article (i) – 1e, 46 – 42%
Starting with the protagonist makes
novel writing about as easy as it is possible to make novel writing. As I wrote, if we start with the protagonist,
I can’t guarantee you the next bestseller, but I can assure you it will solve
four problems common to novelists:
1.
What is the plot?
2.
Why is my novel so short?
3.
Why is my novel so simplistic and
uncomplicated in terms of plot and theme?
4.
Why do I get writer’s block when I
want to write?
Not every writer gets writer’s
block. I never get writer’s block. I get tired of writing. I sometimes want to change up my writing
(write something different). I never run out of something to write. How could that be? Doesn’t everyone get writer’s block? Only in the movies, and I would say only
non-professional writers.
Here’s some ideas to help you
prevent writer’s block.
1.
Nothing anyone writes the first time
on paper (or ether) is worth reading, publishing, or anything else.
2.
You gotta write to learn to write
well.
3.
If you don’t like it, dump it.
4.
If you are in over your head, just
stop and regroup.
5.
These are all helpful ideas for
getting your stuff together, but why don’t professionals have the problem of
writer’s block?
Writing paragraphs may be the most
powerful way to train up your writing skills.
None of the paragraphs I wrote as a seventh grader are worth reading
now, but they sure helped me learn to write.
We are writing about training.
Every paragraph looks like this:
1.
Topic sentence
2.
Body based on the topic
3.
Conclusion and transition
Every paragraph looks like this
except dialog paragraphs. These are
special paragraphs that are designed through the speaker rather than coherent
outline.
You must include tone and body
language in the dialog, or the conversation will go awry for the reader. There is more to dialog to make it sound
correct to the reader.
I’m repeating in synopsis all my
previous advice on writing dialog, but dialog is very important and most
beginning (and some experienced) writers seem to have problems with it.
So, we saw that dialog follows
normal human conversational order, lets the dialog flow, uses contractions,
doesn’t use direct address, expresses tone, body language, tags, and action in
the dialog. These are the most straight
forward and best way to correct most dialog.
Then you need to study and practice.
Here is an example of getting to big
talk in a dialog. This is from my
unpublished novel, Azure Rose:
Enchantment and the Detective:
On the evening of
the twelfth, Azure dressed in the rose dress.
She thought it was slightly distasteful with a satin lacy top and see
through lacy panels below, but it was popular and likely what Lady Atwell would
have worn for a movie production—or on the red carpet. She sighed, the dress would have been perfect
if it had been white. She pulled up her
elbow length rose gloves, stepped into her rose Gucci slippers, and pinned on
her rose lace hat. Whatever she did, she
would not fully follow the instructions of Sveta Long no matter what the
repercussions.
Lachlann drove up
the lane to the front of the house.
Azure spotted him from her room.
She pulled on her delightfully white fur coat and zipped down the
stairs. As she passed the family parlor,
she called out a hasty farewell to Miss Highgate and Accilia and ran out the
back door. She slowed her steps as she
came around the house.
Lachlann stood
waiting for her. He wore a military coat
over his blue mess dress—the one with all the medals. He bowed, “Good evening, Lady Wishart.”
Azure turned up
her nose. She entered the Jaguar,
“Tonight you may call me Azure Rose. I will not claim a title.”
Lachlann closed
the door and stepped to his side. Before
he answered her, he entered, started the automobile, and headed down the lane,
“Lady Wishart, for that is what your invitation read, I suspect you should be
prepared to fully assume your title and to face the presence of my mother.”
Azure crossed her
arms, “Take me home.”
“I shall
not. I also guessed that you ladies
intend a powwow based on your current case.”
She bowed her
head, “I know that is true.”
“Then you should
buck up a bit.”
Azure growled,
“Then I shall expect you to protect me, Lachlann Calloway.”
“I shall always
protect you, Lady Wishart… because I love you.”
Azure turned to
stare at him. She yanked her face away
and watched the darkness pass as they entered the M40.
Lachlann
continued, “I didn’t have the opportunity before because you are intentionally
ignoring me, but I think you look absolutely smashing. I’ve longed to see you in a dress that befits
your name and beauty.”
Azure was only
half listening, “Why did you say that to me?”
“Say what—that I
think you look smashing?”
“No, you sot—that
you love me.”
“I said that I
love you because it’s true.”
Azure’s hands
were trembling, “My father told me that unless a man was willing to back up
such a confession of love to ignore it completely.”
“What if I said I
was willing to back it up, but that I am waiting for a positive response form
the lady?”
“Then you are a
fool. This lady is too busy to take such
things into consideration.”
“Then there is no
reason for me to make any other commitment.
I shall simply continue to love and pursue you.”
Azure kept her
head turned. She swallowed more than
once very hard, and said not a word.
Lachlann drove
them to Lyons House. It was in a very
old neighborhood near Kensington Place Gardens.
He pulled up to the front of the house and handed his keys to the
attendant. Then he retrieved Azure from
the passenger side. They walked arm in
arm up the walk to the large and beautiful house.
Two
rather new looking stone lions sat at either side of the imposing oaken
door. The house’s facing was stone and
brick in the emperor style. It appeared
very old.
A young looking
butler opened the door to them, “Good evening.
I’m Harold. May I announce you?”
Lachlann stepped
forward, “Harold, it’s me, Lachlann, and I’m the guest of the beautiful and provocative,
Lady Wishart.”
Harold’s brows
rose, “Wing Commander Calloway, I’m certain the lady is beautiful but not
necessarily provocative. Who would
invite you to Mrs. and Mr. Long’s party?”
Lachlann pulled
Azure forward, “The Lady Wishart, of course.”
Azure coolly held
out her card and invitation, “Good evening, Harold. I’m Lady Wishart.” She said her name as if the words were forced
from between her lips.
Harold brought
out his silver platter for her card and invitation. He bowed deeply to her, “Lady Wishart, you
are very welcome. I will announce you
and your guest.”
He took their
coats. The moment Lachlann saw her
entire in the rose dress his face gave twitch, “I knew you would look
beautiful, but I didn’t expect a princess.”
Azure blushed,
“That is too much.”
Harold gave a
twitch of a smile too, “The Wing Commander is correct, but I shall not be over
exuberant as he is. A duchess would be
my conclusion.”
Azure pursed her
lips and frowned, “But a duchess is a princess.”
Harold’s eyes
twinkled. He gestured and headed down
the hallway off the foyer. They entered
into a classical large ballroom with twin staircases at the back. Dark and ancient wood paneled the interior. The rugs were Turkish and slightly ragged.
The room was not
crowded with people, but at least fifteen couples stood in the space. Buffet tables filled with food and drink were
stationed under the stairs. A quartet at
the left side played Christmas music intermixed with other classics. Daniel and Sveta Long stood on the right side.
Daniel Long was
medium height and shorter than Lachlann.
His hair was light brown and his features were fine but
nondescript. He possessed a very
pleasant face with a few wrinkles--most seemed to grace his eyes and lips as
though he was used to smiling.
Harold stepped
forward. He didn’t look at Azure’s card
or invitation, “Mrs. and Mr. Long, may I present the Lady Azure Rose Wishart
and her escort, Wing Commander Lachlann Calloway.”
Azure held out
her hand and Daniel Long took it, “Good evening, Lady Wishart. I’d heard Lachlann was coming with you, but I
had no idea he could enter into the good graces of such a spectacularly
beautiful woman.” Daniel bowed over her
hand.
Azure sniffed, a
little put out, “Thank you for inviting me.
I was happy to bring Lachlann with me.”
Daniel released
Azure’s hand. Sveta grasped it and
whispered, “I thought I asked you not to wear your signature clothing.”
Azure gave her a
tart smile, “It’s not white.”
“Yes, well. I’ll not say you don’t have excellent
taste. That’s a Dior, isn’t it?”
“The Queen bought
it for me especially for your party.”
Sveta rolled her
eyes. She pulled Azure to the side and
put her mouth near her ear, “Mrs. Calloway may be attending tonight.”
“Do you wish me
to stay out of her sight?”
Sveta sighed,
“That will not be possible. Use your own
discretion. I will not be able to
protect you.”
“In your own
house?” Azure scowled, “Lachlann shall
protect me.”
“That’s to be
seen.”
“As to our
business, when will we meet and where?”
Sveta let out
another sigh, “When the principles have gathered. I’m waiting for Klava to arrive. Enjoy yourselves. I’ll send Harold for you when we are ready,
but I’d like to wait until the party is winding down.”
Azure’s slitted
her eyes, “Is there anyone else I should know about who is attending your
party?”
Sveta glanced
around, “Why? I don’t think so. Everyone else here are members of the
Organization or MI6. You’ll not mention
anything about that or Stele, please.”
Azure turned her
a withering glance, “Really? Of course
not. Who do you think I am?”
Sveta curtsied,
“I do apologize. I didn’t mean it that
way.”
“Very well.”
Azure grasped
Lachlann’s hand and pulled him toward the main part of the ballroom. Lachlann snared them a couple of flutes of
Champaign, and they filled their plates from the buffet tables.
They found a
quiet table on which to place their food.
Lachlann stated, “Daniel Long is the head of the Organization.”
Azure nodded, “I
know.”
“Everyone here is
a member of MI6 or the Organization.”
“So Sveta told
me. I suppose, we shall have our little
meeting near the end of the party. Do
you think your mother will attend?”
Lachlann’s lips
curled down in a frown, “She will indeed.”
He pointed, “There she is now with father.”
Azure turned
quickly around and away from the direction Lachlann pointed, “It will be
impossible for me to remain hidden in this small room and with this small
crowd.”
“She doesn’t know
who you are, so don’t be alarmed.”
Azure turned him
a baleful glace, “You will protect me. I
insist.”
Lachlann mumbled,
“I will protect you—I promised.”
Azure gave him a
quavering smile, “That isn’t at all reassuring.” She picked up her flute of Champaign and took
a sip.
Lachlann sucked
in a deep breath, “Prepare yourself. She
is coming directly toward us.”
Azure choked and
Champaign dribbled from her lips.
Lachlann handed her his napkin.
Mrs. Calloway
came right up to them on the other side of the table. James Calloway grasped Kathrin Calloway’s
hand and tried to redirect her, “Kathrin, there are some people I’d like you to
meet…”
Mrs. Calloway
stopped on the far side of the table.
Her voice was low, but commanding, “There is a single person, whom I
would very much like to meet at the moment.
You may go, James. I’ll catch up
with you later.”
James didn’t
budge.
Azure didn’t turn
around. She held the napkin against her
face.
Mrs. Calloway
squinted at Azure’s back, then turned her eyes to Lachlann, “Lachlann Calloway,
please introduce me to your date.”
Lachlann cleared
his throat, “Mother, you’ve met her before.
This is Miss Azure Rose.”
“Lachlann. Preposterous.
She is not Miss Azure Rose. There
is no such person. I suspect this is Lady
Azure Rose Wishart. I demand to know why
she is here, and why you are escorting this person?”
Azure didn’t turn
around. She didn’t lower her napkin.
Lachlann licked
his lips, “Sveta invited Miss Rose to her Christmas party. I agreed to escort her.”
“Is this the same
schoolgirl you brought to church and our house?”
“Yes, the same
Miss Rose.”
“I guessed that
something was up. I checked out your
Miss Rose when I looked through Sveta’s invitation list. Who should I spot but the Lady Wishart. Lady Wishart, I demand to know why you were
included in this party. I ordered that
you should be excluded from any official associations with these groups.”
Azure spoke from
behind her napkin, “This is not an official event.”
“Again,
preposterous. You know very well what
kind of event this is.”
Azure
turned. She still held her napkin in
front of her face, “This is a Christmas Party.
Why should I not attend if I am invited, and why should I not be
escorted by my suitor.”
Mrs. Calloway
took an entire step back. She couldn’t
mask her astonishment. When she
recovered a little of her aplomb, she responded, “Your suitor? Have things moved as far as that? Lachlann, I demand to know your relationship
with this person.”
Lachlann grimaced
and put out his hands, “Mother, this is really not the place for this kind of
discussion.”
“This woman is
not what she seems, Lachlann. I don’t want
you near her, and I don’t wish to associate with her on any basis.”
Azure’s voice
trembled, “Lachlann, take me home. I
will not be slighted, and I declare insult.”
“My son shall not
take you anywhere. I fear for his
position and morals.”
Azure’s eyes
flashed, “That was uncalled for.
Lachlann, you promised.”
Lachlann set his
mouth, “I must agree. The Lady Wishart
was invited by Mrs. and Mr. Long. I will
not discontinue my relationship with her.
I do intend to marry her.”
Mrs. Calloway’s
eyes opened wide, “I need to sit down.
This is too much for me to process all at once.”
Azure’s eyes
widened as well, “To marry me?”
Lachlann took her
hands in his, “What do you think it meant when I said I love you?”
Mrs. Calloway’s
knees buckled. Mr. Calloway grasped her
arm. She exclaimed, “Lachlann, you told
her you love her? I can’t let this
stand.”
Lachlann stood
straight, “Mother, you are making a scene.
I am in love with this fine lady.
I will not be put off by you or by her.”
Azure licked her
lips, “I haven’t said yes or given you any affirmation at all.”
Mrs. Calloway
snarled, “That’s it then. The Lady
doesn’t share your affections and that pleases me more than words can tell.”
Lachlann turned
his mother a piercing glance, “Your opinion, Mother, has nothing to do with
this. I love this lady, and I will not
be put off by you or her.”
Sveta and Klava
came running up to the table. Sveta
arrived first, “Really, Mother, you are making a scene. Could we take this to a more private venue?”
Klava nodded,
“Sveta’s guests are staring.”
Azure raised her
chin, “I have been publically insulted.”
Sveta nodded, “I
do apologize, Lady Wishart. Would you
please come with me, Klava, and Mrs. Calloway so we can discuss this together?”
Azure put up her
hand, “Not without Lachlann. He has
promised, no, he has sworn to protect me.”
Mrs. Calloway
frowned, “Sworn? In what way sworn?”
Azure grinned,
“By the One and all.”
Mrs. Calloway
groused, “I took that to be your meaning.”
“Then why did you
ask?”
Mrs. Calloway’s
mouth worked soundlessly in frustration.
Sveta wrung her
hands together, “I shall swear to protect you, Lady Wishart. If you will but come with us.”
Azure glanced
down her nose at Sveta, “By the One and all?”
Sveta whispered,
“Yes, if necessary, by the One and all.
I do swear to protect you, Lady Wishart.” A faint thunderclap sounded in the distance,
and Sveta’s hair rose slightly at the back.”
Azure released
Lachlann’s hands, “Then I will attend you.
Lachlann, wait for me. I shall
require you later.”
Lachlann
bowed. Mr. Calloway bowed.
Klava led Mrs.
Calloway and Sveta, followed by Azure followed.
James Calloway
began speaking with Lachlann. The
conversation in the room suddenly began to assume its normal character.
In this dialog, we are getting to
the big talk. The big talk isn’t exactly
what you might think, however, on the way to the big talk, we already got to
some big talk. In this case, the big
talk is about marriage and Lachlann’s mother’s unhappiness with his proposed fiancée. This example brings us pretty quickly to the big
talk, and there is even more big talk. I’ll give the remainder of this example
next.
In the end, we can figure out what
makes a work have a great plot, and apply this to our writing.
Let’s start with the idea of an
internal and external telic flaw. Then
let’s provide it a wrapper. The wrapper
is the plot.
The beginning of creativity is study
and effort. We can use this to
extrapolate to creativity. In addition,
we need to look at recording ideas and working with ideas.
More
tomorrow.
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