Writing Ideas - New Novel, part 544, Example Verbal, Gesture, Action Q and A

6 October 2015, Writing Ideas - New Novel, part 544, Example Verbal, Gesture, Action Q and A

Announcement: Delay, my new novels can be seen on the internet, but the publisher has delayed all their fiction output due to the economy.  I'll keep you informed.  More information can be found at www.ancientlight.com.  Check out my novels--I think you'll really enjoy them.

Introduction: I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon. This was my 21st novel and through this blog, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing. In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes. You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel beginning with http://www.pilotlion.blogspot.com/2010/10/new-novel-part-3-girl-and-demon.html.

I'm using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published. I'll keep you informed along the way.

Today's Blog: To see the steps in the publication process, visit my writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select "production schedule," you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.

The four plus one basic rules I employ when writing:

1. Don't confuse your readers.

2. Entertain your readers.

3. Ground your readers in the writing.

4. Don't show (or tell) everything.

5. Immerse yourself in the world of your writing.

All novels have five discrete parts:

1.  The initial scene (the beginning)

2.  The rising action

3.  The climax

4.  The falling action

5.  The dénouement

The theme statement of my 26th novel, working title, Shape, is this: Mrs. Lyons captures a shape-shifting girl in her pantry and rehabilitates her.

Here is the cover proposal for Lilly: Enchantment and the Computer.  Lilly is my 24th novel.

Cover Proposal

The most important scene in any novel is the initial scene, but eventually, you have to move to the rising action.  I've started writing Shape.

I'm an advocate of using the/a scene input/output method to drive the rising action--in fact, to write any novel. 

Scene development:

1.  Scene input (easy)

2.  Scene output (a little harder)

3.  Scene setting (basic stuff)

4.  Creativity (creative elements of the scene)

5.  Tension (development of creative elements to build excitement)

6.  Release (climax of creative elements)

I can immediately discern three ways to invoke creativity:

1.  History extrapolation

2.  Technological extrapolation

3.  Intellectual extrapolation

Creativity is like an extrapolation of what has been.  It is a reflection of something new created with ties to the history, science, and logic (the intellect).  Creativity requires consuming, thinking, and producing. 

One of my blog readers posed these questions.  I'll use the next few weeks to answer them.

1.  Conflict/tension between characters

2.  Character presentation (appearance, speech, behavior, gestures, actions)

3.  Change, complexity of relationship, and relation to issues/theme

4.  Evolving vs static character

5.  Language and style

6.  Verbal, gesture, action

7.  Words employed

8.  Sentence length

9.  Complexity

10.  Type of grammar

11.  Diction

12.  Field of reference or allusion

13.  Tone

14.  Mannerism suggest by speech

15.  Style

16.  Distinct manner of writing or speaking you employ, and why (like Pinter's style includes gaps, silences, non-sequitors, and fragments while Chekhov's includes 'apparent' inconclusiveness).

Moving on to 6. 6.  Verbal, gesture, action

Short digression:  I'm writing from Vancouver, British Columbia. 

Usually, my main focus on verbal, action, and gesture is for the purpose of identification of characters during conversation and to bring out the unspoken parts of the conversation.  In general, the entire purpose of gesture, action, and verbal is in character revelation. 

Here is an example from my newest novel, Shape.  This is the first cut, so it will likely change to some degree.  I doubt I will change much of the conversation or the actions or gestures.  They all convey exactly what I am trying to do with this writing.  Let’s look in detail at the conversation (verbal), actions, and gestures.  Kathrin who is also the goddess Ceridwen is speaking.  Kathrin is having second thoughts about her actions against Essie (the Aos Si).

Kathrin looked down, “She does sing the music of the fae—that’s exactly what we heard at her concert.  She played the night music of the fae.  She didn’t sing it, she allowed the organ to sing her song.”

Leila knuckled her eyes, “Grandmother, I saw her scars.  You placed them there…”

“I did not scar her.”

“You did grandmother.  You allowed the fae to capture her.  They gave her to the Morfrans.  The Morfrans beat her to keep her captive and to prevent her from using her power.”

“What is that to me?”

Leila stood, “If Essie is your subject, how can you cause her so much pain and suffering.”

  Leila is an easily agitated person.  She is also twelve, so easily agitated.  Conversations have levels of excitement for the readers and the characters.  At the top is screaming and yelling.  At the bottom is ease and gentleness.  Most conversations are somewhere in between.  In most of my novels, like real life, the characters aren’t yelling and screaming at each other.  They are conversing with some degree of agitation and excitement.  In every case, the conversation is real for the novel—therefore, I want to convey ideas, but without a lot of stupid digression and wasted words like “real” conversation.  The point is to convey the greatest with the leastest.  In this case, Leila wants to agitate her grandmother, Kathrin to action.  She doesn’t want to excite her grandmother to action against her.  Therefore, Leila is not yelling or screaming—that works in novels about as well as in real life.  So, she stands.>

Kathrin pressed her lips together, “I really don’t wish to argue with you, Leila.  She doesn’t suffer as we do—the Aos Si is a dangerous creature.”

  Kathrin is not happy with her own argument.  Watch people in real life, when they are trying to hide their real emotions, they bite their lips, purse, or press their lips together. Pressing your lips into a line can also mean neutrality as opposed to a smile or a frown.>

Leila clenched her fists, “Do you know the revenge Essie took on the fae for her confinement?”

  This is a not so subtle reminder of how much Leila is trying to control herself.  Clenched fists, by themselves conveys a message.  With a statement, they indicate the degree of control Leila is applying and the strength of her statement.  Note, I don’t tell you anything about tone or degree—instead, the gesture conveys how Leila said the statement without the need of any other explanation.>

Kathrin cocked her head.

  In this case, a gesture is used in place of words.  Cocked head is a symbol for listening and attention.  The gesture tells the reader and the characters that Kathrin is listening and paying attention to Leila’s argument.  You can see how effective this is in showing as opposed to telling the readers—Kathrin digested Leila’s argument.  This gesture shows, this other statement tells.>

“Essie blessed them.  She does not take revenge.  She has the power to cause all kinds of suffering, but she doesn’t.  She chooses not to.”

“I asked you—what is that to me?”

“Grandmother, the reason the fae oppose you now is because of her.”

“Sit down, Leila.”

Leila shook for a moment, then she plopped down in her chair again.

Kathrin thought for a long moment.

When Leila began to speak, Kathrin up up her hand.  Finally, Kathrin stated, “I admit.  We are having a problem with the fae.  I believe that problem has to do with the Aos Si.  I think I am beginning to understand part of the problem, but I’m not certain.”  Kathrin turned to Tilly, “Tilly, what do you think about all this?”

“I saw the scars on Essie’s back.  I have her cage in my garden shed.  I saw the Morfrans beat her…”

Kathrin sat up, “Beat her—you actually saw them beat her?”

“They told me, Ceridwen required them to hold and beat her.  They said they acted on Ceridwen’s orders.”

Kathrin colored, “I didn’t imagine.”

Leila snarled, “You said yourself she doesn’t suffer as we do—she suffers much more than we do.”

Kathrin put out her hand, “Hush, Leila.  I am trying to determine what to do about this.”

Leila curled her lip, “It should be obvious to you.”

Kathrin stared at her, “I want to ask Tilly’s opinion.”

I’ve left the rest up.  I’ll explain more tomorrow.            

More tomorrow.

For more information, you can visit my author site http://www.ldalford.com/, and my individual novel websites:

http://www.ancientlight.com/
http://www.aegyptnovel.com/
http://www.centurionnovel.com
http://www.thesecondmission.com/
http://www.theendofhonor.com/
http://www.thefoxshonor.com
http://www.aseasonofhonor.com  

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Writing Ideas - New Novel, part 543, more Verbal, Gesture, Action Q and A

5 October 2015, Writing Ideas - New Novel, part 543, more Verbal, Gesture, Action Q and A

Announcement: Delay, my new novels can be seen on the internet, but the publisher has delayed all their fiction output due to the economy.  I'll keep you informed.  More information can be found at www.ancientlight.com.  Check out my novels--I think you'll really enjoy them.

Introduction: I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon. This was my 21st novel and through this blog, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing. In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes. You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel beginning with http://www.pilotlion.blogspot.com/2010/10/new-novel-part-3-girl-and-demon.html.

I'm using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published. I'll keep you informed along the way.

Today's Blog: To see the steps in the publication process, visit my writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select "production schedule," you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.

The four plus one basic rules I employ when writing:

1. Don't confuse your readers.

2. Entertain your readers.

3. Ground your readers in the writing.

4. Don't show (or tell) everything.

5. Immerse yourself in the world of your writing.

All novels have five discrete parts:

1.  The initial scene (the beginning)

2.  The rising action

3.  The climax

4.  The falling action

5.  The dénouement

The theme statement of my 26th novel, working title, Shape, is this: Mrs. Lyons captures a shape-shifting girl in her pantry and rehabilitates her.

Here is the cover proposal for Lilly: Enchantment and the Computer.  Lilly is my 24th novel.

Cover Proposal

The most important scene in any novel is the initial scene, but eventually, you have to move to the rising action.  I've started writing Shape.

I'm an advocate of using the/a scene input/output method to drive the rising action--in fact, to write any novel. 

Scene development:

1.  Scene input (easy)

2.  Scene output (a little harder)

3.  Scene setting (basic stuff)

4.  Creativity (creative elements of the scene)

5.  Tension (development of creative elements to build excitement)

6.  Release (climax of creative elements)

I can immediately discern three ways to invoke creativity:

1.  History extrapolation

2.  Technological extrapolation

3.  Intellectual extrapolation

Creativity is like an extrapolation of what has been.  It is a reflection of something new created with ties to the history, science, and logic (the intellect).  Creativity requires consuming, thinking, and producing. 

One of my blog readers posed these questions.  I'll use the next few weeks to answer them.

1.  Conflict/tension between characters

2.  Character presentation (appearance, speech, behavior, gestures, actions)

3.  Change, complexity of relationship, and relation to issues/theme

4.  Evolving vs static character

5.  Language and style

6.  Verbal, gesture, action

7.  Words employed

8.  Sentence length

9.  Complexity

10.  Type of grammar

11.  Diction

12.  Field of reference or allusion

13.  Tone

14.  Mannerism suggest by speech

15.  Style

16.  Distinct manner of writing or speaking you employ, and why (like Pinter's style includes gaps, silences, non-sequitors, and fragments while Chekhov's includes 'apparent' inconclusiveness).

Moving on to 6. 6.  Verbal, gesture, action

Short digression:  I'm writing from Ketchikan, Alaska. 

Usually, my main focus on verbal, action, and gesture is for the purpose of identification of characters during conversation and to bring out the unspoken parts of the conversation.  In general, the entire purpose of gesture, action, and verbal is in character revelation. 

Here is an example from my newest novel, Shape.  This is the first cut, so it will likely change to some degree.  I doubt I will change much of the conversation or the actions or gestures.  They all convey exactly what I am trying to do with this writing.  Let’s look in detail at the conversation (verbal), actions, and gestures.

Kathrin looked down, “She does sing the music of the fae—that’s exactly what we heard at her concert.  She played the night music of the fae.  She didn’t sing it, she allowed the organ to sing her song.”

Kathrin who is also the goddess Ceridwen is speaking.  Kathrin is having second thoughts about her actions against Essie (the Aos Si).  Kathrin looks down.  This is a universal English expression of discomfort.  To look down or shift the eyes to the side etc. Each gesture or action means something slightly different.  In the context, it means Kathrin is uncomfortable and is thinking.  What she is thinking is about her own words—Essie (the Aos Si) sings the songs of the fae.  This is an important symbol in the novel.

Leila knuckled her eyes, “Grandmother, I saw her scars.  You placed them there…”

Knuckling your eyes is an indicator.  When you write, you want to show and not tell.  I could tell you, Leila is sad or Leila is crying—I don’t need to.  I show you that she is knuckling her eyes.  This is a way people try to hide their sadness.  If you know Leila, you know she is proud and she doesn’t cry.  She gets worse and worse as she gets older.  The reason Leila is sad is in her words.  The fun part of this action and gesture is that it is placed in front of the words.  In many if not most cases, the author will want to show the reader the emotion and ideas behind the words.  This prepares the reader and puts the words into the proper light the author intends—pretty tricky, no?

“I did not scar her.”

“You did grandmother.  You allowed the fae to capture her.  They gave her to the Morfrans.  The Morfrans beat her to keep her captive and to prevent her from using her power.”

“What is that to me?”

Leila stood, “If Essie is your subject, how can you cause her so much pain and suffering.”

Kathrin pressed her lips together, “I really don’t wish to argue with you, Leila.  She doesn’t suffer as we do—the Aos Si is a dangerous creature.”

Leila clenched her fists, “Do you know the revenge Essie took on the fae for her confinement?”

Kathrin cocked her head.

“Essie blessed them.  She does not take revenge.  She has the power to cause all kinds of suffering, but she doesn’t.  She chooses not to.”

“I asked you—what is that to me?”

“Grandmother, the reason the fae oppose you now is because of her.”

“Sit down, Leila.”

Leila shook for a moment, then she plopped down in her chair again.

Kathrin thought for a long moment.

When Leila began to speak, Kathrin up up her hand.  Finally, Kathrin stated, “I admit.  We are having a problem with the fae.  I believe that problem has to do with the Aos Si.  I think I am beginning to understand part of the problem, but I’m not certain.”  Kathrin turned to Tilly, “Tilly, what do you think about all this?”

“I saw the scars on Essie’s back.  I have her cage in my garden shed.  I saw the Morfrans beat her…”

Kathrin sat up, “Beat her—you actually saw them beat her?”

“They told me, Ceridwen required them to hold and beat her.  They said they acted on Ceridwen’s orders.”

Kathrin colored, “I didn’t imagine.”

Leila snarled, “You said yourself she doesn’t suffer as we do—she suffers much more than we do.”

Kathrin put out her hand, “Hush, Leila.  I am trying to determine what to do about this.”

Leila curled her lip, “It should be obvious to you.”

Kathrin stared at her, “I want to ask Tilly’s opinion.”

I’ve left the rest up.  I’ll explain more tomorrow.            

More tomorrow.

For more information, you can visit my author site http://www.ldalford.com/, and my individual novel websites:

http://www.ancientlight.com/
http://www.aegyptnovel.com/
http://www.centurionnovel.com
http://www.thesecondmission.com/
http://www.theendofhonor.com/
http://www.thefoxshonor.com
http://www.aseasonofhonor.com  

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Writing Ideas - New Novel, part 542, Verbal, Gesture, Action Q and A

4 October 2015, Writing Ideas - New Novel, part 542, Verbal, Gesture, Action Q and A

Announcement: Delay, my new novels can be seen on the internet, but the publisher has delayed all their fiction output due to the economy.  I'll keep you informed.  More information can be found at www.ancientlight.com.  Check out my novels--I think you'll really enjoy them.

Introduction: I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon. This was my 21st novel and through this blog, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing. In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes. You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel beginning with http://www.pilotlion.blogspot.com/2010/10/new-novel-part-3-girl-and-demon.html.

I'm using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published. I'll keep you informed along the way.

Today's Blog: To see the steps in the publication process, visit my writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select "production schedule," you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.

The four plus one basic rules I employ when writing:

1. Don't confuse your readers.

2. Entertain your readers.

3. Ground your readers in the writing.

4. Don't show (or tell) everything.

5. Immerse yourself in the world of your writing.

All novels have five discrete parts:

1.  The initial scene (the beginning)

2.  The rising action

3.  The climax

4.  The falling action

5.  The dénouement

The theme statement of my 26th novel, working title, Shape, is this: Mrs. Lyons captures a shape-shifting girl in her pantry and rehabilitates her.

Here is the cover proposal for Lilly: Enchantment and the Computer.  Lilly is my 24th novel.

Cover Proposal

The most important scene in any novel is the initial scene, but eventually, you have to move to the rising action.  I've started writing Shape.

I'm an advocate of using the/a scene input/output method to drive the rising action--in fact, to write any novel. 

Scene development:

1.  Scene input (easy)

2.  Scene output (a little harder)

3.  Scene setting (basic stuff)

4.  Creativity (creative elements of the scene)

5.  Tension (development of creative elements to build excitement)

6.  Release (climax of creative elements)

I can immediately discern three ways to invoke creativity:

1.  History extrapolation

2.  Technological extrapolation

3.  Intellectual extrapolation

Creativity is like an extrapolation of what has been.  It is a reflection of something new created with ties to the history, science, and logic (the intellect).  Creativity requires consuming, thinking, and producing. 

One of my blog readers posed these questions.  I'll use the next few weeks to answer them.

1.  Conflict/tension between characters

2.  Character presentation (appearance, speech, behavior, gestures, actions)

3.  Change, complexity of relationship, and relation to issues/theme

4.  Evolving vs static character

5.  Language and style

6.  Verbal, gesture, action

7.  Words employed

8.  Sentence length

9.  Complexity

10.  Type of grammar

11.  Diction

12.  Field of reference or allusion

13.  Tone

14.  Mannerism suggest by speech

15.  Style

16.  Distinct manner of writing or speaking you employ, and why (like Pinter's style includes gaps, silences, non-sequitors, and fragments while Chekhov's includes 'apparent' inconclusiveness).

Moving on to 6. 6.  Verbal, gesture, action

Short digression:  I'm writing from Ketchikan, Alaska. 

Language is probably worth at least a year of explanation and example, but I’ll move on to the next question.  I already addressed this question in detail before, but we might as well tackle it again.  I can try to look at the idea of verbal, gesture, and action from a different standpoint than before.

Usually, my main focus on verbal, action, and gesture is for the purpose of identification of characters during conversation and to bring out the unspoken parts of the conversation.  In general, the entire purpose of gesture, action, and verbal is in character revelation.  So let’s contemplate that for a moment.

There is something implied directly in that last statement.  For example, in a novel, as opposed to a conversation, the writer can point out beautiful events and moments that happen often in real conversation, but are revelations in a novel’s conversation.  I’m talking about the pregnant pause in all of its types, styles, and glory.  I’ve heard that you shouldn’t say: no one spoke, as part of a conversation in writing.  I disagree completely.  Simply by writing: no one spoke, the author is revealing something potentially important about the conversation and conversers.  There are other ways to convey these moments of silence. 

In a real conversation, the conversers might simply miss, ignore, or bowl over the silence—in a novel, the moment becomes a moment of revelation.  Thus:

Kathrin looked down, “She does sing the music of the fae—that’s exactly what we heard at her concert.  She played the night music of the fae.  She didn’t sing it, she allowed the organ to sing her song.”

Leila knuckled her eyes, “Grandmother, I saw her scars.  You placed them there…”

“I did not scar her.”

“You did grandmother.  You allowed the fae to capture her.  They gave her to the Morfrans.  The Morfrans beat her to keep her captive and to prevent her from using her power.”

“What is that to me?”

Leila stood, “If Essie is your subject, how can you cause her so much pain and suffering.”

Kathrin pressed her lips together, “I really don’t wish to argue with you, Leila.  She doesn’t suffer as we do—the Aos Si is a dangerous creature.”

Leila clenched her fists, “Do you know the revenge Essie took on the fae for her confinement?”

Kathrin cocked her head.

“Essie blessed them.  She does not take revenge.  She has the power to cause all kinds of suffering, but she doesn’t.  She chooses not to.”

“I asked you—what is that to me?”

“Grandmother, the reason the fae oppose you now is because of her.”

“Sit down, Leila.”

Leila shook for a moment, then she plopped down in her chair again.

Kathrin thought for a long moment.

When Leila began to speak, Kathrin up up her hand.  Finally, Kathrin stated, “I admit.  We are having a problem with the fae.  I believe that problem has to do with the Aos Si.  I think I am beginning to understand part of the problem, but I’m not certain.”  Kathrin turned to Tilly, “Tilly, what do you think about all this?”

“I saw the scars on Essie’s back.  I have her cage in my garden shed.  I saw the Morfrans beat her…”

Kathrin sat up, “Beat her—you actually saw them beat her?”

“They told me, Ceridwen required them to hold and beat her.  They said they acted on Ceridwen’s orders.”

Kathrin colored, “I didn’t imagine.”

Leila snarled, “You said yourself she doesn’t suffer as we do—she suffers much more than we do.”

Kathrin put out her hand, “Hush, Leila.  I am trying to determine what to do about this.”

Leila curled her lip, “It should be obvious to you.”

Kathrin stared at her, “I want to ask Tilly’s opinion.”

The above presents an example of conversation from my latest novel, Shape.  The conversation contains three instances of silence or broken conversation where actions or gestures occur instead of speech.  These points and places are as important as what is spoken in the text.  I’ll get into more tomorrow.            

More tomorrow.

For more information, you can visit my author site http://www.ldalford.com/, and my individual novel websites:

http://www.ancientlight.com/
http://www.aegyptnovel.com/
http://www.centurionnovel.com
http://www.thesecondmission.com/
http://www.theendofhonor.com/
http://www.thefoxshonor.com
http://www.aseasonofhonor.com  

fiction, theme, plot, story, storyline, character development, scene, setting, conversation, novel, book, writing, information, study, marketing, tension, release, creative, idea, logic