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Saturday, March 14, 2015

Writing Ideas - New Novel, part 338, Conversation Escape Initial Scene

14 March 2015, Writing Ideas - New Novel, part 338, Conversation Escape Initial Scene

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Introduction: I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon. This was my 21st novel and through this blog, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing. In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes. You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel beginning with

I'm using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published. I'll keep you informed along the way.

Today's Blog: To see the steps in the publication process, visit my writing website and select "production schedule," you will be sent to

The four plus one basic rules I employ when writing:

1. Don't confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the writing.
4. Don't show (or tell) everything.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your writing.

All novels have five discrete parts:
1.  The initial scene (the beginning)
2.  The rising action
3.  The climax
4.  The falling action
5.  The dénouement

The theme statement of my 25th novel, working title, Escape, is this: a girl in a fascist island nation will do anything to escape--a young cargo shuttle pilot not following the rules crashes on the island.

Here is the cover proposal for Lilly: Enchantment and the ComputerLilly is my 24th novel.
Cover Proposal
The most important scene in any novel is the initial scene.  I'm writing about the initial scene of my newest novel, "Escape."  Escape is the working title.  I'll decide on the proposed title when I finish the novel.  I'm at the fifteenth chapter right now.  That means I've written about 300 pages.

One very great problem for many inexperienced writers is conversation.  Their writing of conversation sounds trite and forced to them.  They want to know the tricks to writing good conversation.  This is a great aspiration and an important skill.  About 90% of my novels is conversation.  I love to write conversation, and I see it as the major tool of the novelist.  I'll spend some time defining what makes good written conversation in a novel and how to write it.

Here is the example from my newest novel Escape (working title).  This section still needs some work, but I'll use it as an example of conversation in a novel.

Scott unlatched the helmet at the neck and pulled it off, “Hi there.  Are you all right?”

Look carefully at this first paragraph of conversation.  Look at the tag and identifier.  The identifier tell "who" said the statement--the tag tells us what they were doing at the time.  Note--no said.  The tag and identifier is an action and action words (verbs) that don't necessarily have anything to say about the saying as much as the doing. 

Second point of this first paragraph.  Look at the first statements--they are a greeting.  Normal conversations always move from greeting, to introductions, to small talk, to in depth conversation.  This conversation doesn't follow that model following the first statement, but that's okay.  I'll show you an example of a more normal conversation later.

Rebecka could understand his words although the accent was strange to her ears.  She was breathless, “Did you come to get me?”

The reason this conversation was derailed form the normal conversation progression is Reb has a great desire, and in her mind, the pilot is there to fulfill her desire.  I'll leave up the rest of the conversation--we'll look at it further.

The man stood straight as though the question caught him completely off guard, “To get you?”  He took a moment to regain his thoughts, “No my engine failed.  I’m afraid I’m stuck until they rescue me…”  The last sounded slightly desperate in his ears.  “Do you think I could get some help here?”

Rebecka shook her head slowly, “This is Freedom.  I’ve never heard of anyone coming here from anywhere else before.”

“Freedom?  That’s an odd name for this place.  Could you help me?”

Rebecka stood in contemplation for a long time.

Finally, Scott asked again, “Can you help me?”

“Do you really think they will come for you?”

“Eventually…,” But that didn’t sound very reassuring either.”

“If you will take me with you when you leave here—I’ll help you…”

“Take you with me?”

“Listen to me.  You don’t stand a chance here without help.  If you will take me with you, I will do everything in my power to help you.”

“I’m not so sure about that.”

Rebecka stuck her hands on her hips, “Do we have an agreement or not?  If you wait too long, the armed citizens will come and take you away.  If that happens, you will be judged and categorized.  If that happens, I don’t think you will ever leave here.”

“Judged and categorized…what’s that?”

“Listen to me very carefully.  I can see you know nothing about this place…”

“You’re right about that.”

“You don’t stand a chance without help.  I will help you, but you must promise to take me with you.”

Scott thought for a moment.  A sudden noise from the west startled them both.

Rebecka stamped her foot, “We don’t have very long.  Make up your mind…”

Scott sighed, “If you will help me, I’ll do anything you wish…”

“Is that a promise?  Do you swear?”

“I swear.”

“As a citizen…”

“I’m not a citizen.”

Rebecka was taken aback, “You do swear by all you hold sacred?”

“I swear.”

Rebecka stepped up to him and grasped his gloved hand, “Then come with me.”

I will discuss writing conversation in some detail.    

More tomorrow.

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