29 July 2023, Writing - part xxx394 Writing a Novel, Seoirse, Editing, got, utilize, and other extraneous words
Announcement: Delay, my new novels can be seen on the
internet, but my primary publisher has gone out of business—they couldn’t
succeed in the past business and publishing environment. I’ll keep you
informed, but I need a new publisher.
More information can be found at www.ancientlight.com. Check out my novels—I think
you’ll really enjoy them.
Introduction: I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon.
This was my 21st novel and through this blog, I gave you the entire
novel in installments that included commentary on the writing. In the
commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained,
how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing
techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes. You can look back
through this blog and read the entire novel beginning with http://www.pilotlion.blogspot.com/2010/10/new-novel-part-3-girl-and-demon.html.
I’m using this novel as an example
of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published. I’ll
keep you informed along the way.
Today’s Blog: To see the steps in the publication process, visit my
writing websites http://www.sisteroflight.com/.
The four plus one basic rules I
employ when writing:
1. Don’t confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the writing.
4. Don’t show (or tell) everything.
4a. Show what can
be seen, heard, felt, smelled, and tasted on the stage of the novel.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your writing.
These are the steps I use to write a novel including the
five discrete parts of a novel:
1.
Design
the initial scene
2. Develop a theme statement (initial
setting, protagonist, protagonist’s helper or antagonist, action statement)
a.
Research
as required
b.
Develop
the initial setting
c.
Develop
the characters
d.
Identify
the telic flaw (internal and external)
3. Write the initial scene (identify
the output: implied setting, implied characters, implied action movement)
4. Write the next scene(s) to the
climax (rising action)
5. Write the climax scene
6. Write the falling action scene(s)
7.
Write
the dénouement scene
I finished writing my 31st novel, working title, Cassandra,
potential title Cassandra: Enchantment
and the Warriors. The theme
statement is: Deirdre and Sorcha are redirected to French finishing school
where they discover difficult mysteries, people, and events.
Here is the cover proposal for Cassandra: Enchantment and the Warriors:
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The most important scene in any
novel is the initial scene, but eventually, you have to move to the rising
action. I am continuing to write on my 30th novel, working
title Red Sonja. I finished my 29th novel, working
title Detective. Writing number 31, working title Shifter. I just finished 32nd novel, Rose.
How to begin a novel.
Number one thought, we need an entertaining idea. I usually encapsulate such an idea with a
theme statement. Since I’m writing a new
novel, we need a new theme statement.
Here is an initial cut.
For novel 30: Red
Sonja, a Soviet spy, infiltrates the X-plane programs at Edwards AFB as a test
pilot’s administrative clerk, learns about freedom, and is redeemed.
For novel 31: Deirdre
and Sorcha are redirected to French finishing school where they discover
difficult mysteries, people, and events.
For Novel 32: Shiggy
Tash finds a lost girl in the isolated Scottish safe house her organization
gives her for her latest assignment: Rose Craigie has nothing, is alone, and
needs someone or something to rescue and acknowledge her as a human being.
For novel 33, Book girl: Siobhàn Shaw is Morven McLean’s savior—they
are both attending Kilgraston School in Scotland when Morven loses everything,
her wealth, position, and friends, and Siobhàn Shaw is the only one left to
befriend and help her discover the one thing that might save Morven’s family
and existence.
For novel 34: Seoirse
is assigned to be Rose’s protector and helper at Monmouth while Rose deals with
five goddesses and schoolwork; unfortunately Seoirse has fallen in love with
Rose.
Here is the
scene development outline:
1. Scene
input (comes from the previous scene output or is an initial scene)
2. Write the
scene setting (place, time, stuff, and characters)
3. Imagine
the output, creative elements, plot, telic flaw resolution (climax) and develop
the tension and release.
4. Write the
scene using the output and creative elements to build the tension.
5. Write the
release
6. Write the
kicker
Today: Let me tell
you a little about writing. Writing
isn’t so much a hobby, a career, or a pastime.
Writing is a habit and an obsession.
We who love to write love to write.
If you love
to write, the problem is gaining the skills to write well. We want to write well enough to have others
enjoy our writing. This is
important. No one writes just for
themselves the idea is absolutely irrational and silly. I can prove why.
In the first
place, the purpose of writing is communication—that’s the only purpose. Writing is the abstract communication of the
mind through symbols. As time goes by,
we as writers gain more and better tools and our readers gain more and better
appreciation for those tools and skills—even if they have no idea what they
are.
We are in
the modern era. In this time, the action
and dialog style along with the push of technology forced novels into the form
of third person, past tense, action and dialog style, implying the future. This is the modern style of the novel. I also showed how the end of literature
created the reflected worldview. We have
three possible worldviews for a novel: the real, the reflected, and the
created. I choose to work in the reflected
worldview.
Why don’t we
go back to the basics and just writing a novel?
I can tell you what I do, and show you how I go about putting a novel
together. We can start with developing
an idea then move into the details of the writing.
Ideas. We need
ideas. Ideas allow us to figure out the
protagonist and the telic flaw. Ideas
don’t come fully armed from the mind of Zeus.
We need to cultivate ideas.
1.
Read
novels.
2. Fill your mind with good
stuff—basically the stuff you want to write about.
3. Figure out what will build ideas in
your mind and what will kill ideas in your mind.
4. Study.
5. Teach.
6. Make the catharsis.
7.
Write.
The development of ideas is based on study and research, but
it is also based on creativity. Creativity
is the extrapolation of older ideas to form new ones or to present old ideas in
a new form. It is a reflection of
something new created with ties to the history, science, and logic (the
intellect). Creativity requires
consuming, thinking, and producing.
If we have filled our mind with all kinds of information and
ideas, we are ready to become creative.
Creativity means the extrapolation of older ideas to form new ones or to
present old ideas in a new form.
Literally, we are seeing the world in a new way, or actually, we are
seeing some part of the world in a new way.
The beginning of creativity is study and effort. We can use this to extrapolate to
creativity. In addition, we need to look
at recording ideas and working with ideas.
With that said, where should we go? Should I delve into ideas and creativity
again, or should we just move into the novel again? Should I develop a new protagonist, which, we
know, will result in a new novel. I’ve
got an idea, but it went stale. Let’s
look at the outline for a novel again:
1.
The initial scene
2.
The rising action
scenes
3.
The climax scene
4.
The falling action
scene(s)
5.
The dénouement scene(s)
The initial scene is the most important scene and part of
any novel. To get to the initial scene,
you don’t need a plot, you need a protagonist.
I’m now writing Seoirse, and since I retired from my day job,
I’m back to a chapter a day. I could
likely write two chapters a day, but my brain gets tired. I think it’s important to report again on how
to write a novel. Let’s start at the
beginning.
I already developed the protagonist for this novel: Seoirse Séamas
Wishart. That is his name in
Gaelic. His common or English name is
George James Wishart. Why the
difference. It all has to do with the
worldview of my novels. The worldview is
reflected and therefore the supernatural exists. We are mainly writing about the common and
mythical supernatural in the world. I’d
like to say that whatever the basis for the usual supernatural in human thought
exists in the reflected worldview of this and my novels. Thus there are vampires, werewolves, fairies,
the Fae courts, dragons, gods, goddesses, and other mythical creatures. They aren’t the world. They world of my novels is the world you see
around you. The supernatural aspects are
generally unseen, unknown, and rare.
They exist like the supernatural exists in the world today: generally
unseen, unknown, and rare. That’s the
basis of the world in my novels.
This is where I am with Seoirse. I’ve been writing a chapter a day. That means I’ll likely have a completed novel
in less than a month. That’s what I
usually do when I have an idea and a novel to write. I’m also writing pretty exclusively when I
should be working on a publisher or an agent.
Here is a list of parts of words and words you can use to
search your documents. I’ll discuss each
of these.
-ing
had
-ly
were – passive voice
was – passive voice
gotten
even
said
got
utilize
got, utilize, and
other extraneous – I already covered got.
Got is rot, but I’ll repeat myself.
Got can be used appropriately in dialog.
There, you’ll usually find it in it’s less offensive state—get. As in:
Jake yelled, “Sadie get your gun.”
Present tense in the dialog and this all makes sense. There is nothing wrong with get. Until we put it in the past tense narrative.
Sadie got her gun.
In the business, we say, gotten is rotten and got is
rot. The reason is that got is just one
of those words that usually doesn’t fit well in the narrative. If it does, and it sounds right in context,
by all means, use it, but I recommend finding a stronger verb or a better
verb. For example:
Sadie picked up her gun.
Or, Sadie grabbed her gun. Or,
Sadie found her gun.
Each are subtly different, but they sound better than using
got, at least to me. For got, it’s rot,
but it can be used if it fits. On to the
other words.
What’s wrong with utilize.
This word is the exact same as use.
Why not use, use? That’s what I
want to know. Utilize sounds so much
more pretentious and special. I say,
dump utilize. The only place you should
hear it (use it) is in dialog for a smart ass scientist who doesn’t have the
best training in English. Those are the
kinds of people who use utilize. The
managers have heard it so much from their engineers and scientists, they’re
using it now all the time. Just dump
it. I only use utilize when I want a
character to sound stupid. Alas, the
world in the USA has taken this word to mean use and stopped using use. Go back to use, for goodness sakes.
Are there other words?
Yes, there are and thanks for asking.
Most importantly, there are style and tone words. Some of them are appropriate in dialog, but
should be removed in narrative. In some
cases, they do aid the tone of the narrative and especially the tone of the
dialog. What are they?
Well, there are all types of both filler words and
extraneous words. That’s part of the
problem. It is almost impossible to list
them all. I’ll point out some obvious
ones. Here we go:
Bob sat down.
Down, in this case is extraneous. There is only one down you can sit. Just write:
Bob sat.
On the other hand:
Jake said, “Bob, sit down and shut up.”
Even if we get rid of the shut up part, if I write:
Jake said, “Bob, sit.”
That just doesn’t sound right at all. In dialog the tone and feel of the words are
very important. That doesn’t mean it isn’t
important in the narrative, but Bob sat is perfect Bob sat down has an
unnecessary word. How about this:
Jake looked pretty good.
Pretty is extraneous, but it can also be a tone word. In other words, you can write Jake looked
good, but that is very different in feel with Jake looked pretty good. The pretty makes the sentence have a very
different and specific sound and feel. You
can see this in dialog too.
So, here’s the point.
Many would tell you, get rid of all extraneous and unnecessary words in
your narrative especially and your dialog.
I’m telling you, look at tone and feel.
In some cases in both narrative and in dialog, the extraneous give an
appeal and feel to the writing that fits the style and point of the speakers
and the work itself. That’s not to say,
you shouldn’t know what you are doing.
Look for extraneous and unnecessary words and get rid of those that
shouldn’t be there. An example:
Jake was sitting pretty with a very beautiful wife, an
expensive great sports car, and a lovely and loyal dog.
Fix it like this:
Jake was sitting pretty with a beautiful wife, an expensive sports
car, and a loyal dog.
I didn’t get rid of the past participle (continuous) verb
form because “sitting pretty” is a figure of speech in English. You could write, “hit the big time.” That’s also a figure of speech.
Bottom line: got is rot, use use instead of utilize, and get
rid of extraneous words.
I want to write another book based on Rose and Seoirse, and
the topic will be the raising of Ceridwen—at least that’s my plan. We shall see.
More
tomorrow.
For more information, you can visit my author site http://www.ldalford.com/, and my individual novel websites:
http://www.ancientlight.com/
http://www.aegyptnovel.com/
http://www.centurionnovel.com
http://www.thesecondmission.com/
http://www.theendofhonor.com/
http://www.thefoxshonor.com
http://www.aseasonofhonor.com
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