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Tuesday, March 6, 2012

Development - more Description in Character Revelation

6 March 2012, Development - more Description in Character Revelation

Introduction: I realized that I need to introduce this blog a little. I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon. The working title was Daemon, and this was my 21st novel. Over the last year, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing. In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes. You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel.

I'm using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published. I'll keep you informed along the way.

Today's Blog: To see the steps in the publication process, visit my writing website and select "production schedule," you will be sent to

Before I really get into anything about character development (revelation) I need to finish this discussion of the creative development of Aksinya.  We have a relatively complete picture of the demon.  Remember, the character of the demon is already developed, but it hasn't been revealed.  The last blog, I gave you the initial description of the demon.  This description was developed by studying various sources in ancient literature.  I put together a picture of Asmodeus from the classical descriptions of him.  With a description, the picture is almost complete. 

You might guess we need a picture of Aksinya as well:

     The woman was dressed in a black gown that was much too large for her.  Beautiful hand made lace cascaded down the front of the dress and decorated the sleeves.  Thick velvet competed with black satin to form a perfect attire to greet a Tsar, but certainly not a commissar.  The gown fell loosely away from the woman’s thin chest and small breasts.  It looked odd draped on her body, like a girl playing dress-up from her mother’s closet.  But this gown obviously came from the closet of a princess.
     Aksinya, the woman within the pentagram, squinted across the dark cellar.  She was barely eighteen and much too thin for her age.  She was petit; that was a polite way of saying small.  And underdeveloped, that was a polite way of saying she didn’t yet appear much like a woman.  Aksinya’s hair was dark brown and silky and beautiful, bound up in a long braid, but her face was plain and Russian, so Russian.  Her voice was soft and sometimes too shrill.  When she was excited it rose in strength and pitch, so she never sounded very mature or well mannered. 

This is the initial description of the young woman, Aksinya.  I didn't build the description until after I designed the character.  In this description, we already see Aksinya in action.  The character is yet unrevealed, but she is developed and complete.  You as a reader just don't know what it is.  As the author know exactly what and who Aksinya is.  This is what I revealed in the novel to you.

We'll look more at the creative process in Aksinya tomorrow.

I'll repeat my published novel websites so you can see more examples:, and the individual novel websites:,,,,, and

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