14 October 2017, Writing - part
x281, Novel Form, Traveling and Tension
Announcement: Delay, my new novels can be seen on the internet, but the publisher
has delayed all their fiction output due to the economy. I'll keep you
informed. More information can be found at www.ancientlight.com. Check out my novels--I think you'll really enjoy
them.
Introduction: I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon.
This was my 21st novel and through this blog, I gave you the entire novel in
installments that included commentary on the writing. In the commentary, in
addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel
was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and
tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes. You can look back through this
blog and read the entire novel beginning with http://www.pilotlion.blogspot.com/2010/10/new-novel-part-3-girl-and-demon.html.
I'm using this novel as an example
of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published. I'll
keep you informed along the way.
Today's Blog: To see the steps in the publication process, visit my
writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select "production
schedule," you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.
The four plus one basic rules I
employ when writing:
1. Don't confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the
writing.
4. Don't show (or tell) everything.
4a. Show what can be seen, heard, felt, smelled, and tasted on the stage
of the novel.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your writing.
These are the steps I use to write a
novel including the five discrete parts of a novel:
1.
Design the initial scene
2.
Develop a theme statement (initial
setting, protagonist, protagonist’s helper or antagonist, action statement)
a.
Research as required
b.
Develop the initial setting
c.
Develop the characters
d.
Identify the telic flaw (internal
and external)
3.
Write the initial scene (identify
the output: implied setting, implied characters, implied action movement)
4.
Write the next scene(s) to the
climax (rising action)
5.
Write the climax scene
6.
Write the falling action scene(s)
7.
Write the dénouement scene
I
finished writing my 28th novel, working title, School, potential
title Deirdre: Enchantment and the School. The theme statement is: Sorcha, the abandoned
child of an Unseelie and a human, secretly attends Wycombe Abbey girls’ school
where she meets the problem child Deirdre and is redeemed.
Here is the cover proposal for Deirdre:
Enchantment and the School.
The most important scene in any
novel is the initial scene, but eventually, you have to move to the rising
action. I continued writing my 29th novel, working title Red Sonja. I finished my 28th novel, working
title School. If you noticed, I started on number 28, but
finished number 29 (in the starting sequence—it’s actually higher than
that). I adjusted the numbering. I do keep everything clear in my
records.
How to begin a novel. Number one thought, we need an entertaining
idea. I usually encapsulate such an idea
with a theme statement. Since I’m
writing a new novel, we need a new theme statement. Here is an initial cut.
For novel 29: Red Sonja, a Soviet spy, infiltrates the
X-plane programs at Edwards AFB as a test pilot’s administrative clerk, learns
about freedom, and is redeemed.
This
is the classical form for writing a successful novel:
1.
Design the initial scene
2.
Develop a theme statement (initial
setting, protagonist, protagonist’s helper or antagonist, action statement)
a.
Research as required
b.
Develop the initial setting
c.
Develop the characters (protagonist,
antagonist, and optionally the protagonist’s helper)
d.
Identify the telic flaw of the
protagonist (internal and external)
3.
Write the initial scene (identify
the output: implied setting, implied characters, implied action movement)
4.
Write the next scene(s) to the
climax (rising action)
5.
Write the climax scene
6.
Write the falling action scene(s)
7.
Write the dénouement scene
The
protagonist and the telic flaw are tied permanently together. The novel plot is completely dependent on the
protagonist and the protagonist’s telic flaw.
They are inseparable. This is
likely the most critical concept about any normal (classical) form novel.
Here
are the parts of a normal (classical) novel:
1.
The Initial scene (identify the
output: implied setting, implied characters, implied action movement)
2.
The Rising action scenes
3.
The Climax scene
4.
The Falling action scene(s)
5.
The Dénouement scene
So,
how do you write a rich and powerful initial scene? Let’s start from a theme statement. Here is an example from my latest novel:
The
theme statement for Deirdre: Enchantment
and the School is: Sorcha, the abandoned child of an Unseelie and a human,
secretly attends Wycombe Abbey girls’ school where she meets the problem child
Deirdre and is redeemed.
Here
is the scene development outline:
1.
Scene input (comes from the previous scene output or is an initial scene)
2.
Write the scene setting (place, time, stuff, and characters)
3.
Imagine the output, creative elements, plot, telic flaw resolution (climax) and
develop the tension and release.
4.
Write the scene using the output and creative elements to build the tension.
5.
Write the release
6.
Write the kicker
If
you have the characters (protagonist, protagonist’s helper, and antagonist),
the initial setting, the telic flaw (from the protagonist), a plot idea, the
theme action, then you are ready to write the initial scene. I would state that since you have a
protagonist, the telic flaw, a plot idea, and the theme action, you have about
everything—what you might be lacking is the tension and release cycle in your scenes.
Here is an example of developing or
building tension and release in a scene.
This example is from Shadow of
Darkness an Ancient Light novel. We are moving toward the climax of the novel
and of the revelation of the protagonist.
Sveta and Aleksandr have decided to head towards Berlin. At the time, there is no Berlin Wall that had
to wait for JFK to botch it up with the Soviets. The Soviets and the East German military and
police still guard the borders and so does the other remaining allied nations:
France, Britain, and the USA.
You might be able to guess exactly
what the climax of the novel will bring or be.
Sveta started in Berlin with the desire to seek her greatest nemesis and
a nemesis for the whole world. She is
returning to Berlin with the hope of escaping the Soviet Union.
Here is the scene:
Sveta looked up excitedly, “We can hide in Germany . I speak German well enough to get us
through.”
“They will expect that, and the border is being sealed off.”
“Berlin
is still relatively open.”
Aleksandr nodded, “Is that it then? We head to Berlin and cross into the American sector?”
“Any of the sectors will work. Can we get a map?”
“In the university, but I am afraid to go there.”
“We can get a map on the way.
Let’s go now. The papers I cut
for us will let us travel. They are very
general and should let us move around all of the Soviet states without much
problem.”
“What about Oba?”
“Oba is very good at hiding.
He will have fewer problems than we will.”
“If we are agreed, then let’s pack and go.”
“Should we wait until dark—are they watching your flat?”
Aleksandr shook his head, “I don’t know.”
Oba spoke, his lips formed a half grin, “Mistress, I can seek
out those who might watch.”
Sveta made a gesture, “Go then and see.”
Oba bowed and disappeared out of the door.
When Oba was gone, Sveta leaned on her hands at either side
of her on the bed, “I kissed you last night, Sasha.”
“Svetochka, do you feel bad about that?”
She bowed her head, “I feel a little ashamed. I am afraid I have lost you as my friend and
that you can’t love me any more. I’m
afraid you will take advantage of me.”
“I would like very much to take advantage of you…”
Her mouth opened in shock.
Aleksandr stood up, “…but I won’t Svetochka. Because I do love you.” He stepped over to her and kissed her open
mouth. She responded fervently, but he
reluctantly pulled back, “Pack your bag, Svetochka. We must leave, and we must leave soon.”
Her eyes followed him across the room. Aleksandr began to put his few clothes and some
belongings in his traveling bag. Sveta
stood and replaced everything back in her small bag.
Oba returned in about an hour, “No one watches.”
Sveta stood with her bag, “Good, Oba. We are ready to go. We are heading to the Lenin station. Go ahead and keep an eye out.”
Oba left the room and Sveta went to the door. Aleksandr looked around his room, “I spent a
long time here, but it feels good to leave.”
Sveta gazed at him in curiosity.
“Svetochka, doesn’t it feel like we are making a completely new
beginning? Aren’t you excited?”
Sveta laughed at him.
She held out her hand, “My father is a dreamer too. Come on, Sashechka.”
Aleksandr grasped her hand and they exited his room, through
the corridor, down the dark stairs and out into the bright summer
sunlight. They didn’t see Oba, and
walked slowly to the station. It was not
very far away. They heard a long train
whistle.
Aleksandr squeezed Sveta’s hand as they approached the
station area, “We should separate and buy the tickets individually.” They stopped at a quiet corner.
“Where to Sashechka?”
“We shouldn’t go too far at each step. Let’s travel first to Smolensk .
We’ll buy new tickets there for the next stop. We can’t act like we are in a hurry.”
“No hurry and short hops,” Sveta smiled.
“We shouldn’t speak to each other while we are
traveling. Keep me in sight. That way if one of us gets caught the other
can run.”
Sveta frowned, “I would never run. Not without you.”
Aleksandr kissed her.
She smiled again. “Svetochka,
I’ll go first. You follow in a few
minutes.” He handed Sveta her bag.
Aleksandr walked the rest of the way to the station. He felt uncomfortable amid all the
people. He didn’t feel any anonymity in
the crowd. He felt as though he stood
out more than usual. He went to the
ticket kiosk, showed his papers, and purchased a ticket to Smolensk .
Then he went to wait for the train.
Sveta came up a few minutes later.
She also bought a ticket. Aleksandr
bought a newspaper and started reading.
They probably shouldn’t be traveling on the same train. It was too late now. Aleksandr recognized he wasn’t very good at
these spy things. There was nothing in Pravda or Krasnaya Zvezda about Sveta or her office—that was good.
They boarded the train without any problems. Sveta sat at the back of the car and Aleksandr
at the front. Their eyes met
occasionally. They arrived at Smolensk that
evening. They both ate at a food cart
near the station, and only spoke long enough to coordinate the next step. Aleksandr asked, “Where did Oba go?”
“He was on the train.
He watches over me now. Where
next?”
“I checked the train tables—Minsk .”
She nodded.
They purchased tickets for Minsk and entered the train separately. The evening trains were not too full, and
they caught cat naps on the hard train seats.
I
like traveling transitions and scenes for lots of reasons. In this case, I can’t use one of my favorite
reasons, however, dialog. Sveta,
Aleksandr, and Oba must separate themselves.
They can only communicate furtively as they travel. Otherwise, they have to give the impression
that they don’t know each other.
I’m
not as enamored of travel in aircraft, unless the characters are in the
crew. The reason is the time and the
experience. Travel by foot, bike, car,
or train allows time and conversation.
You go from place to place, and you see things and experience things
(events). In an aircraft, the passengers
usually go willy-nilly to interconnecting places to get on other aircraft. There is no travel in a logical direction or
place to place. Perhaps the most
effective use in describing aircraft passenger flight is the terminals, their
contents, and the flight scheduling.
In
addition, in travel by foot, car, bike, or train, the characters can observe
the world going on around them. History
can happen all around them and the author can report about that history. In an aircraft, the characters overfly the
world and don’t interact with it.
Boats
are a little different. They are kind of
like aircraft and trains. The author can
report on history with some degree of isolation from the events of it.
In
any case, traveling is a great way to develop tension and then release. I certainly don’t suggest you write: they got
on the train in Delaware and arrived in Ohio.
Travel scenes deserve much more than this. The creative elements can come from all kinds
of sources: oversized baggage, contraband, escape, historical peril, police,
border incidents, and all.
Perhaps
the most intriguing point of describing travel is the ability to show
historically how people traveled during a certain period of time. Simply the historical description of the
cars, engines, people, dining, smoking, and a whole host of other
considerations. To record all this in a
historical novel in a way that people can begin to understand and see the way
the world was in a certain time and place gives me great excitement.
I’ll
give you more examples.
More
tomorrow.
For more information, you can visit my
author site http://www.ldalford.com/, and my individual novel websites:
http://www.ancientlight.com/
http://www.aegyptnovel.com/
http://www.centurionnovel.com
http://www.thesecondmission.com/
http://www.theendofhonor.com/
http://www.thefoxshonor.com
http://www.aseasonofhonor.com
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http://www.thesecondmission.com/
http://www.theendofhonor.com/
http://www.thefoxshonor.com
http://www.aseasonofhonor.com
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