Writing Ideas - New Novel, part 188, proof Legal-Historical Method and Other's Conversation, Methods of Revelation How to Develop Storyline, Rising Action

15 October 2014, Writing Ideas - New Novel, part 188, proof Legal-Historical Method and Other's Conversation, Methods of Revelation How to Develop Storyline, Rising Action

Announcement: My editor sent a round of emails last night concerning the back cover materials.  That included the book teaser and the author bio.  They looked good.  They also sent the covers for the individual novels.  I'll put up the covers when I can.  The proposed 3 in1 cover and info can be found at www.ancientlight.com.  I'll keep you updated.  I should have three new books out soon.

Introduction: I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon. This was my 21st novel and through this blog, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing. In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes. You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel beginning with http://www.pilotlion.blogspot.com/2010/10/new-novel-part-3-girl-and-demon.html.

I'm using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published. I'll keep you informed along the way.

Today's Blog: To see the steps in the publication process, visit my writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select "production schedule," you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.

The four plus one basic rules I employ when writing:

1. Don't confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the writing.
4. Don't show (or tell) everything.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your writing.

All novels have five discrete parts:
1.  The initial scene (the beginning)
2.  The rising action
3.  The climax
4.  The falling action
5.  The dénouement

The theme statement of my newest novel, Valeska, is this: An agent of the organization becomes involved with a vampire girl during a mission, she becomes dependent on the agent, and she is redeemed.

Here is my proposed cover for Valeska:

I decided on a white cover style.  You can see more at www.GoddessofDarkness.com.

The purpose of a novel is to reveal the protagonist and usually the protagonist's helper, the author needs to place them in circumstance that allows them to reveal themselves.  The means can be conversation, exploration, discovery, other's conversation, confession, accidental discovery.

There are three ways to know truth: the scientific method, the historical-witness method, and logic.  In using the Legal-Historical method, we look for witnesses and evidence.  When studying witnesses and evidence, using the Legal-Historical method, we rate witnesses and evidence in terms of primacy.  Primacy is a measure of the closeness of the witness and the evidence.  We measure this witness specifically by the closeness of the witness and the evidence.  A witness (or evidence) that is an eye witness (or the record of an eyewitness)--a direct witness to an event in history is called a primary witness.  A primary witness is always the best witness and is considered the highest level of witness.  One very important rule in the Legal-Historical method is that primary witnesses are always considered better than any other witness.  Primary witnesses are always considered of equal weight unless one is proven to be wrong by other primary evidence or witness.  A primary witness is always considered more accurate than any lesser witness.  By the way, it is significantly difficult to disprove a primary witness.

The next level of witness is called secondary.  A secondary witness is called a hearsay witness.  A hearsay witness is the record of a witness who interviewed or heard the information from a primary witness.  In a court of law, hearsay witness is not allowed.  In history, many times the best witness we have is a secondary witness.  The most common secondary witness is a newspaper report.  Bet you didn't know that a newspaper report is considered less accurate than any primary witness, and that it is hearsay evidence.

More tomorrow.

For more information, you can visit my author site http://www.ldalford.com/, and my individual novel websites:
http://www.aegyptnovel.com/
http://www.centurionnovel.com
http://www.thesecondmission.com/
http://www.theendofhonor.com/
http://www.thefoxshonor.com
http://www.aseasonofhonor.com

A New Novel, Part 280 Smile at Every Opportunity

11 July 2011, A New Novel, Part 280 Smile at Every Opportunity

For those who haven’t been following this blog, let me introduce it a little. I am currently blogging my 21st novel that has the working title Daemon. The novel is about Aksinya, a sorceress, who, to save her family from the Bolsheviks, called and contracted the demon, Asmodeus. Her family was murdered anyway, and she fled with the demon from Russia to Austria.

Aksinya was found not guilty and released to the custody of Father Dobrushin.  They say goodbye to Natalya and make their way out of the courtroom...

Natalya hugged Aksinya, “I have to go, Princess, Herr von Taaffe is waiting for me.”

Aksinya took her hand, “I pray this is not the last time I shall see you.”

“If it is the last or not, I will never forget you, Princess.  Go with all the blessings of the earth.”  She moved quickly to where Ernst von Taaffe stood at the side of the room.  He made a slight bow toward Aksinya, but he didn’t smile.

“And all the blessings of the heavens,” Father Dobrushin continued for her.  “Come, Princess, the day is not over and we have work that must be finished before tomorrow.”  He placed his long coat over her shoulders and started for the door.

Aksinya rushed to catch up to him, “What must we do before tomorrow?”

“We will speak about it at dinner.  First, we must negotiate the reporters.  They will take your picture.”

“I look terrible.”

“You won’t look any better if you don’t smile.  I suggest that you hold your shoulders very straight, act like the princess you are, and smile at every opportunity.”

“Yes…yes, I shall.”

“Then come on.”

Aksinya took his arm.  Before they left the Rathaus, Sergeant Nagel brought Aksinya’s blankets and the Greek Bible to them.  Father Dobrushin put them under his arm and carried them for Aksinya.

The trial is at an end, and we think Aksinya has won.  Perhaps in some measure she has.  Could the demon have ever thought that Aksinya could be found not guilty and be released.  She herself seems to realize just how important her freedom is.

Natalya leaves her as both a friend and, to a degree, an equal.  Ernst is waiting for her, and though Ernst can't find it in himself to smile at Aksinya, he does honor her.  Natalya sends Aksinya away with a great blessing.  It is a blessing that Father Dobrushin completes.  Natalya chooses Ernst over Aksinya--this is significant.  We will shortly see someone else who has made such a choice.

Father Dobrushin places his coat over Aksinya and they head for the door--then a foreshadowing:  "...we have work that must be finished before tomorrow.”  Then about the reporters and Aksinya's picture.  Father Dobrushin tells her, they will speak about everything at dinner.  Aksinya is back to herself a little.  She says she looks terrible.  I want to remind you of this.  She doesn't think she is very pleasant to look at already, and she has not bathed or changed her clothing in weeks.  Even in this time, she must present a terrible picture.  Father Dobrushin advises her to smile and continue smiling.  If you look terrible, you might as well try to look the best you can. 

At the end, I don't want you to forget about everything that has gone before.  Everything is not over yet--the blankets and the other things from Aksinya's cell remind you of that.  Plus, Captain Gerber hasn't returned.  Nothing happened to him, but he hasn't found Asmodeus.  Tomorrow, dinner.

A New Novel, Part 279 He Gave Me into Your Custody

10 July 2011, A New Novel, Part 279 He Gave Me into Your Custody

For those who haven’t been following this blog, let me introduce it a little. I am currently blogging my 21st novel that has the working title Daemon. The novel is about Aksinya, a sorceress, who, to save her family from the Bolsheviks, called and contracted the demon, Asmodeus. Her family was murdered anyway, and she fled with the demon from Russia to Austria.

Aksinya is on trial in Wien, Austria.  The judge brings up the question of Aksinya's immigration status and international requests to extridite her...

The judge continued to speak.

Aksinya almost clapped her hands together, “Now he will tell me the truth about my guilt.”

Father Dobrushin shushed her.

Judge Richter stated, “Although, this Schöffengericht finds the Princess Aksinya not guilty, the State of Austria has received international letters concerning the Princess.  Both of them request her return to Russia, one for political reasons and the other as extradition for criminal prosecution.  The State of Austria has asked me to make a recommendation and a judgment based on the case at hand.  Since this is not directly related to the charges, only to any potential sentencing, there is no reason for the prosecution to respond.  Defense councilor would you like to make a statement in regard to these requests?”

Father Dobrushin stood, “Yes, Your Honor.  I have reviewed both letters as well as the laws of the State of Austria as it applies to this circumstance.  It is not in the Princess’ best interest to entertain either request from either Russian claim to authority.  She desires to continue as an émigré in Austria and be allowed self-determination in all related issues.  If the court will not grant her this freedom then she is willing to petition the State of Austria for asylum.”

Judge Richter wrote on the paper in front of him, “There will be no need for that, council.  I am granted the authority to reject either or both requests as a recommendation of this court.  It was only in the case of a guilty verdict that the Princess would be extradited to Russia without her consent.  Therefore, by the authority of the State of Austria granted to me, I declare again that you are not guilty of any crime tried in this court and that you are immediately released to the custody of Father Dobrushin Sergeevich Lopuhin.

Aksinya stood and the rest of the court stood.  Aksinya put out her hand, but by the time she could get out a single word, the judges were gone.  She stuttered, “Wait…”

Father Dobrushin asked, “What did you want, Princess?”

“He gave me into your custody—why?”

“I asked for it in the court papers.”

“But why?”

“Because, I want to be the one to help you from now on.  It is official.  You report to me in all issues of your employment, schooling, and living arrangements.”

I continue with Judge Richter from yesterday to move into the piece.  The Court found Aksinya not guilty, but they must also determine her immigration status.  As we see, the White Russians and the Red Russians both want her.  Judge Richter and his court has been asked to make a decision on what to do with Aksinya.  You can guess that if she had been found guilty, she would have been sent back to Russia.  The problem on both sides would likely lead to her death--one would have tried her, the other would have used her as a pawn.

Father Dobrushin cuts off any chance the court might deport Aksinya.  He uses his knowledge of the law to defend and protect her.  The actions of Father Dobrushin are very important as they relate to the Austrian law.

Father Dobrushin's statements lead Judge Richter to repeat his verdict and release Aksinya.  Note, the judge releases Aksinya to the custody of Father Dobrushin.  Now, this is a turn of events, and one that Aksinya doesn't miss at all.  We discover in the ensuing conversation that Father Dobrushin asked for the custody of Aksinya.  This is not that uncommon for women under 21 and indeed could be granted for unmarried women under 30.  You can see that Father Dobrushin has something in mind for Aksinya.  The question is what.  Tomorrow, leave taking.

A New Novel, Part 278 Am I Not Guilty?

9 July 2011, A New Novel, Part 278 Am I Not Guilty?

For those who haven’t been following this blog, let me introduce it a little. I am currently blogging my 21st novel that has the working title Daemon. The novel is about Aksinya, a sorceress, who, to save her family from the Bolsheviks, called and contracted the demon, Asmodeus. Her family was murdered anyway, and she fled with the demon from Russia to Austria.

Aksinya is on trial in Wien, Austria.  We discover Natayla is being kept by Ernst.  We also discover that Natalya has been advised by Father Dobrushin.  Aksinya and Natalya may never see one another again...

Natalya laughed, “I have never been taken care of in my life.  I care for others, that is what I am called to do.  That is also what pleases me.”

The doors behind the large desk opened and the judges stepped to their seats.  The Bailiff stuck his staff against the ground, “Hear ye, hear ye, this Schöffengericht shall pronounce judgment in the name of Emperor Charles the first of Austria and the Republic of German Austria.  May the justice of the Lord God Almighty reign in all the affairs of men.”

Judge Richter didn’t sit.  He shuffled his papers for a moment, “Princess Aksinya Georgovna Holstein-Gottorp-Romanov also known as the Countess Golitsyna, the unanimous verdict of this Schöffengericht is that you are not guilty of any of the charges brought against you in this court.”

Aksinya stared at the Judges.  She turned her head toward Father Dobrushin.  Natalya beamed.  Aksinya asked, “What does it mean?  What is he saying?  Am I not guilty?”

Father Dobrushin whispered, “You are not guilty.”

“But I am guilty of something and especially certain sins.”

“That’s not what this court was to determine.”

Aksinya obviously didn’t understand.

Natalya took Aksinya’s hand, “That is wonderful, Princess.  You shall go free.”

Aksinya swallowed against a lump, “I shall never be free, but I am happy not to go to prison.”

The judge continued to speak.

Aksinya almost clapped her hands together, “Now he will tell me the truth about my guilt.”

Father Dobrushin shushed her.

The court returns to session so that the judges may render their verdict.  They find Aksinya not guilty.  We guessed this might be the result.  We hoped for this result, but it wasn't necessarily to be expected.  The demon has perhaps been thwarted, or then again, perhaps not.

Aksinya is surprised by the verdict.  She can't imagine that she is not guilty.  Aksinya thinks in terms of her sin and not in terms of guilt in a court.  We know she understands judicial process, but she is used to noble judgement and a noble court.  Aksinya is expecting more from the judge.  Note the writing techniques I use to show you Aksinya's response without telling you anything.  Tomorrow, more judgement.

A New Novel, Part 277 Are You Jealous?

8 July 2011, A New Novel, Part 277 Are You Jealous?

For those who haven’t been following this blog, let me introduce it a little. I am currently blogging my 21st novel that has the working title Daemon. The novel is about Aksinya, a sorceress, who, to save her family from the Bolsheviks, called and contracted the demon, Asmodeus. Her family was murdered anyway, and she fled with the demon from Russia to Austria.

Aksinya is on trial in Wien, Austria.  Natalya told the court the reason Aksinya beat her was that she seduced Ernst.  She followed that with the statement that she never brought any charges against Aksinya in the first place.  This leaves Judge Richter with few options...

Prosecutor Trauen stood and tapped his glasses against his hand, “Your Honor, without any remaining charges, there is no reason to continue this trial.”

“I agree, however, in good order, I wish to confer with the other judges before we pronounce our judgment.  There is another issue in relation to this person that must also be decided.”

Father Dobrushin stood, “Your Honor, I beg you not to make any decision that might affect the freedom of the Princess without conferring first with me.”

Judge Richter nodded.  He stood and led the other judges back through their respective doors.

Natalya moved over to Akisnya’s table and Father Dobrushin gave her his seat.  Aksinya kissed her cheeks again and held her close, “Lady Natalya, I am so sorry for the suffering I caused you.  I do beg your pardon.”

“And, I you,” Natalya laughed, “Tears.  When did you ever shed tears for any reason Princess?  I am afraid that beyond this moment, we will not be able to see one another again.”

“Why is that?”

“You have no household and likely will have none, and I am kept by Herr von Taaffe.”

“And you wish to be with him?”

“I would rather be with you, but Father Dobrushin has recommended against it.”

“Does Herr von Taaffe treat you poorly?”

“No, just the opposite.  He treats me too well.  Almost as well as he treated you before.”

“I see.”

“Are you jealous?”

“I should be, but I am not.  I never loved Herr von Taaffe.  I loved the things he could provide me.  I suspect you never get drunk when you go out with Herr von Taaffe.”

“No, why?”

Aksinya smiled, “What does Herr von Taaffe plan to do since his father has rejected him?”

“He has business ventures of his own.  It is not as great as his family’s, but they are substantial.  He wishes to move away from Wien and pursue this work.”

Aksinya sighed, “So long as you are pleased and taken care of.”

Natalya laughed, “I have never been taken care of in my life.  I care for others, that is what I am called to do.  That is also what pleases me.”

The prosecutor agrees--there is no reason to continue the trial.  Judge Richter declares that he must confer with the other judges and that there may be another issue.  Do you remember, the other issue is that of immigration status.  This could send Aksinya directly into the hands of the red or the white Russians.  This is why Father Dobrushin makes his comment.  He is warning the court that he will not sit still and allow them to deport Aksinya without a fight.

The judges leave and that gives Aksinya time to speak with Natalya.  Aksinya apologizes again to Natalya and Natalya to Aksinya.  Then through the conversation of Natalya, I show you that Aksinya is crying.  I don't tell you--I show you through the conversation.  Then the clincher, Natalya tells Aksinya they shell never see each other again.  We learn that Natalya is being kept by Ernst.  In this culture, to be kept means to be a mistress in the household of.  This is a turn you might not have expected.  It also likely means that Ernst intends to marry Natalya.  Ernst's reputation in Wien and in Austria were destroyed by the revelations of the ecclesiastical court.  His only way to recover some of his honor is to marry Natalya.  The match is good and even with her issues, Natalya is a competent person.

Note that Father Dobrushin has been advising Natalya.  He recommended against returning to Aksinya's household.  You can guess the reasons for this.  The only way for Natalya to redeem herself in the culture is to marry Ernst.  Their marriage will make many things right.  Although Ernst may love Aksinya, and Natalya may love Aksinya, only a match between Ernst and Natalya can clear their social and cultural problem.

Aksinya's next question is how Ernst treats Natalya.  You know if he was cruel or abusive, Aksinya would rescue Natalya.  Natalya tells Aksinya that Ernst treats her almost as well as he treated Aksinya.  This is good and somewhat expected.  Ernst is a gentleman. 

Aksinya is not jealous because she knows she never loved him.  Aksinya has learned about love and she understands herself.  Note the statement about drunkenness.  Natalya was always in control of herself.  Note also that Natalya has been brought into the personal counsels and information of Ernst.

The final part of this is a kicker that characterizes Natalya:  “I have never been taken care of in my life.  I care for others, that is what I am called to do.  That is also what pleases me.”  Natalya is taking care of Ernst.  This is what she means.  She has not changed her love, but she is trying to transfer some of her love toward Ernst.  Tomorrow, the verdict of the court.

A New Novel, Part 276 I Did Not Bring Any Charges Against Her

7 July 2011, A New Novel, Part 276 I Did Not Bring Any Charges Against Her

For those who haven’t been following this blog, let me introduce it a little. I am currently blogging my 21st novel that has the working title Daemon. The novel is about Aksinya, a sorceress, who, to save her family from the Bolsheviks, called and contracted the demon, Asmodeus. Her family was murdered anyway, and she fled with the demon from Russia to Austria.

Aksinya is on trial in Wien, Austria.  Natalya is in the witness chair.  She is about to tell the court why Aksinya beat her...

Aksinya stood.  Natalya stood.  Half the courtroom stood.  Aksinya pointed her finger, “Lady Natalya, I forbid you to tell them why I beat you.”

Father Dobrushin pulled Aksinya back into her seat, “The press has already published the reason in the papers.  She announced it during the ecclesiastical trial.  There is no reason for you to stop her testimony.”

Aksinya held her head in her hands, “She shouldn’t have to say it again.”

Natalya sat back down, “The reason the Princess beat me was because I seduced the man she wished to marry.  I seduced Herr von Taaffe.  Because of that, the Princess rightly became enraged.  I deserved to be beaten by her.  I deserved every stroke.  I did not wish to proffer charges against her.  The ecclesiastical court presented them in my name.  I wish for this court to absolve the Princess of every charge related to this.  I know she asked my pardon, and I know from my priest that she has confessed.  I wish to absolutely forgive her and pardon her for this sin against me, because I was the cause of it.  I only wish she could forgive my sin against her.”

Judge Richter pressed his palms against the top of the desk, “Are you certain of what you say Lady Natalya?”

Natalya nodded vigorously.

Aksinya spoke almost automatically, “Lady Natalya, you must speak your response aloud.”

Natalya turned and smiled at Aksinya, “I do mean everything I have said.  I did not bring any charges against her.  I committed a more grave crime than she.  I admit this freely.”

Judge Richter turned to Prosecutor Trauen, “Prosecutor, there are no other charges against the Princess.  Do you have anything else you wish to propose or anything you wish to ask this witness?”

Prosecutor Trauen stood and tapped his glasses against his hand, “Your Honor, without any remaining charges, there is no reason to continue this trial.”

We know already why Aksinya doesn't want Natalya to tell the truth--even though she herself told Natalya to tell the truth, Aksinya wants to be punished.  She doesn't want her friends to be punished in any way.  The demon, Asmodeus, promised to ruin Aksinya's friends--this is what Aksinya wishes to stop, but she can't.  It is too late--the press has already published everything with who knows what gory details.

Then Natalya says the reason--she seduced Ernst, the man Aksinya expected to marry.  This was an enormous cultural, social, and legal problem for the time.  But Natalya goes further, she forgives Aksinya and asks the court to remove the charges.  When the accuser takes back the charges in a court of law and provides a reason like this for the accused, there isn't much the court can do.  It is possible under some legal systems for the state to proffer charges in the name of the injured, but if the injured party absolves the accused of the charges under most legal systems, there isn't much the court can do.  Not only that, in this time and culture, Natalya's actions would be considered deserving of such a beating.  In this case, Aksinya might even be absolved of the murder of Natalya under the laws of the turn of the century.

Thus Judge Richter's response--the injured party is asking that the charges be removed. 

I use the joke about speaking your answers aloud in the court to break the tension and to provide a setup to Natalya's response: “I do mean everything I have said.  I did not bring any charges against her.  I committed a more grave crime than she.  I admit this freely.” 

In this scene we have the absolution of Aksinya and the forgiveness of Natalya.  We know that Aksinya did confess and did repent.  We know that Natalya did repent and was confessed.  We know that all is not right in the world, but between these two people, the world has become whole again.

Thus, the end is the end of the charges against Aksinya.  The judge begins to work the details of this with the prosecutor.  Tomorrow, more problems and more details.

A New Novel, Part 275 I Forbid You to Tell Them Why I Beat You

6 July 2011, A New Novel, Part 275 I Forbid You to Tell Them Why I Beat You

For those who haven’t been following this blog, let me introduce it a little. I am currently blogging my 21st novel that has the working title Daemon. The novel is about Aksinya, a sorceress, who, to save her family from the Bolsheviks, called and contracted the demon, Asmodeus. Her family was murdered anyway, and she fled with the demon from Russia to Austria.

Aksinya is on trial in Wien, Austria.  Following lunch, the court reconvenes.  The presiding judge calls Natalya to the witness chair.  Aksinya abjures Natalya to tell the truth...

“Yes, you must testify and ensure you tell the truth, Lady Natalya.”

Natalya nodded and presented a very worried look on her face.

Sergeant Nagel led Natalya to the witness chair. 

Judge Richter put down his handkerchief, “Judges, please don’t let any of the previous conversation or actions cloud your judgment.  I only allowed it because it seemed an appropriate greeting between friends.”  He tried to put on a stern look, “Lady Natalya, please announce your full name to the court.”

Natalya’s voice was soft but clear, “I am the Lady Natalya Alexandrovna Obolenska.”

“What is your relationship to the Princess Aksinya.”

Natalya put her hands together, “The Count…Princess I mean, rescued me.  No one else in the world would help me, but she did.”

“Rescued you?”

“I was a handmaiden to a noble family in Minsk.  They treated me like a slave.  The Princess rescued me from there and offered me the position of her lady-in-waiting.  She gave me clothing and jewelry.  She cared for me and sent me to school.  She called me her friend and confidant.”

“Can you describe the events of the evening when the Princess beat you?”

“It was the evening that the Princess was supposed to deliver her answer to Herr von Taaffe.”

“Her answer to what?”

“To his proposal of marriage.  Ernst von Taaffe offered to marry her and his father the Graf von Taaffe encouraged the match.  I knew her answer before she gave it.”

“Did she tell you what she would answer the young man?”

“No, Ernst von Taaffe is an honorable man, but he had two very important books that belonged to the Princess.  She wanted them back.  I knew that no matter what happened, her desire for the books would cloud her thinking.”

“What does this have to do with the Princess beating you?”

“This is the reason she beat me.”

“What was the reason?”

Aksinya stood.  Natalya stood.  Half the courtroom stood.  Aksinya pointed her finger, “Lady Natalya, I forbid you to tell them why I beat you.”

Father Dobrushin pulled Aksinya back into her seat, “The press has already published the reason in the papers.  She announced it during the ecclesiastical trial.  There is no reason for you to stop her testimony.”

Yesterday, Aksinya told Natalya to tell the truth.  This worries Natalya.  In any case, the scene is set to hear Natalya's testimony.

Notice how I "show" you the effect of Natalya and Aksinya's reunion on the presiding judge and judges.  I show you that Judge Richter put down his handkerchief.  The implication is that he was affected by their words and actions.  The others were also affected, note the presiding judge instructs the other judges, and he gives Natalya a stern look.

The judge asks Natalya her name and then her relationship with Aksinya.  You would expect Natalya to answer that she was Aksinya's lady-in-waiting etc.  Watch carefully, instead, she tells the court, not her position in Aksinya's household, but rather what Aksinya did for her.  We could have guessed this was the most important issue to Natalya.  Natalya defines herself based on what Aksinya did for her--she worships Aksinya. 

Then we get to the answer the judge expected, but Natalya's answer is still couched in therms of what Aksinya did, listen: "...offered me the position of her lady-in-waiting.  She gave me clothing and jewelry.  She cared for me and sent me to school.  She called me her friend and confidant.”  The judge asked a simple question and received an entire history of Aksinya, so he moves on to the events.

The events of that evening were very critical to the case.  Natalya fills in all the details and becomes more detailed than the judge expected--she mentions the books.  Like real life, we get to the point in a circular manner.  The judge wants to go directly to the point; Natalya wants to tell the truth.  This gets to the reason Aksinya beat Natalya--do you remember, Aksinya would not answer this question--this is the critical question.  Aksinya does not want this answer to come out.  The answer to this question will destroy Natalya and Ernst socially.

This is the reason Aksinya doesn't want anyone to answer the question.  The problem is that the cat is already out of the bag.  Aksinya imagines she can protect her friends--she can't.  As Father Dobrushin knows and pointed out--he will save her.  He might not be able to save the others, but he will save Aksinya from prison and the workhouse--if he can.  Tomorrow, the reason.

A New Novel, Part 274 I Have No Household

5 July 2011, A New Novel, Part 274 I Have No Household

For those who haven’t been following this blog, let me introduce it a little. I am currently blogging my 21st novel that has the working title Daemon. The novel is about Aksinya, a sorceress, who, to save her family from the Bolsheviks, called and contracted the demon, Asmodeus. Her family was murdered anyway, and she fled with the demon from Russia to Austria.

Aksinya is on trial in Wien, Austria.  The presiding judge found Aksinya not guilty of the fraud charges against her.  He did so because her debt had already been paid.  The judge released the court for lunch, where Aksinya and Father Dobrushin have an interesting conversation.  Following lunch, the court reconvenes.  Aksinya and Father Dobrushin return to the courtroom...

Just before one o’clock, Sergeant Nagel escorted them back to the courtroom.  They returned to their seats and waited for the rest of the court to gather.

Directly at one, behind the large desk, two judges came through the door at the right and two judges through the door at the left.  The bailiff of the court struck his staff against the floor, “Hear ye, hear ye, this Schöffengericht is reconvened in the name of Emperor Charles the first of Austria and the Republic of German Austria.  I present again The Honorable Gustav Richter, The Honorable Artur Kuester, Lay Judge Albert Vogler, and Lay Judge Oscar Amsel.  May the justice of the Lord God Almighty reign in all the affairs of men.” 

Judge Richter started up immediately, “The focus of this afternoon are the charges of assault and battery against Princess Aksinya.  The first witness whom I wish to call is the Lady Natalya Alexandrovna Obolenska.  Sergeant Nagel.”

In a couple of minutes, Natalya followed Sergeant Nagel into the courtroom.  She walked with excellent posture, but one of her shoulders drooped a little lower than the other.

Aksinya gave a little cry when she saw Natalya.  Natalya’s eyes lit up.  She ran to Aksinya and curtsied to the floor.  Aksinya took Natalya’s hand and lifted her up.  She stood and embraced Natalya.  Aksinya kissed Natalya’s cheeks.  They were wet with tears.

Judge Richter cleared his throat a couple of times.  He rolled his eyes.  Finally he said something, “Herr Lopuhin, this is highly irregular.”  He paused, “But…yes, I understand.”  He sighed and slumped back into his seat.

Natalya cried, “They wouldn’t let me see you.  I begged and begged, but they said you were in jail.”

Aksinya laughed, “I was in jail.  I will likely go to prison.  I love you so much, and I am so sorry.  I missed you.”

“And I you, mistress.  I wish to join your household again.”

Aksinya looked down, “I have none.”

Father Dobrushin took Aksinya by the arm, “Princess, that is enough.  The Lady Natalya must testify.”

“Yes, you must testify and ensure you tell the truth, Lady Natalya.”

Natalya nodded and presented a very worried look on her face.

Sergeant Nagel led Natalya to the witness chair. 

What kind of reunion did you expect to see with Aksinya and Natalya.  Aksinya loves Natalya.  Natalya worships Aksinya.  Natalya would gladly die for Aksinya--she almost did.  The kind of love and worship Natalya has for Aksinya can't be harmed by any amount of pain and suffering.  The same is true for the Sister Margarethe.  Aksinya's powerful personality gathers followers like a mother hen gathers her chicks. 

Does Aksinya deserve any of this worship.  She saved Natalya more than once.  She was a reluctant actor who acted in every case for Natalya--except once.  This novel is not about those things which are deserved.  This novel is about those things which are entirely undeserved.  Therefore, when Natalya sees Aksinya, she runs to her and curtsies to her and adores her.  Aksinya shows her love too.

Did you notice, Natalya walks with one shoulder lower than the other.  She is permanently crippled from Aksinya's attack.  Natalya didn't deserve this either--or did she.  As I wrote, this isn't a novel about what is deserved, but what is not deserved.

The judge is moved by Natalya and Aksinya's reunion.  Notice, I don't tell you about it--I show it to you.  The judge gives up and lets the ladies greet one another.  That's where I carve out a piece of dialog for you to show you their thoughts--thoughts through dialog.  Did you note, Aksinya said she loves Natalya.  At this point, Aksinya likely understands what love really is.  Natalya wishes to join Aksinya's household again, but Aksinya has none.

Father Dobrushin finally separates them.  Doesn't he chime in at an interesting point in the conversation?  The point about a household.  Listen to Aksinya's order to Natalya: “Yes, you must testify and ensure you tell the truth, Lady Natalya.”  This makes Natalya worried because she does not wish Aksinya to go to prison--you do see that, don't you?  Natalya would do anything for Aksinya including lie.  She was perhaps prepared to lie.  She disobeyed and betrayed her mistress before because of her love.  Tomorrow, Natalya's testimony.

A New Novel, Part 273 Nothing is Certain

4 July 2011, A New Novel, Part 273 Nothing is Certain

For those who haven’t been following this blog, let me introduce it a little. I am currently blogging my 21st novel that has the working title Daemon. The novel is about Aksinya, a sorceress, who, to save her family from the Bolsheviks, called and contracted the demon, Asmodeus. Her family was murdered anyway, and she fled with the demon from Russia to Austria.

Aksinya is on trial in Wien, Austria.  The presiding judge found Aksinya not guilty of the fraud charges against her.  He did so because her debt had already been paid.  The judge then released the court for lunch.  Father Dobrushin and Aksinya head for the luncheon room in the Rathaus...

Sergeant Nagel led Aksinya and Father Dobrushin into the private luncheon room within the Rathaus.  They sat at a private table near the back of the chamber.  Aksinya appeared completely out of place there.  Her hair had not been properly brushed in weeks.  Her dress was wrinkled and stained beyond the bloody crosses that marked it.  It had been the dress of a drudge to begin with.  She had not had a bath either—not in a long while.  She glanced at Father Dobrushin in his clean and well pressed suit and stood, “I don’t belong here.”

Father Dobrushin didn’t look at her, “Sit down, now.  Judge Richter sent you here so you would not have to face the reporters yet.”

She sat, “Yet?”

“When you win and are redeemed, you will have to answer some of their questions.  When that happens, I suggest you keep quiet and allow me to speak for you.”

“I will win?  What does that mean?”

“It means that you will be found not guilty and you will be released.”

“This is certain?”

“Nothing is certain.  All I know is that I will do everything I can to save you.”

“Perhaps you are the foolish one.  What do you gain from all this?  I can’t pay your bill.  In fact, who did pay my bills on the remaining claims?”

“I did.”

“You did?  Why would you do that for me?”

“Right now, I want you to eat something nice and have tea the way you like it.”

“I like tea best the way Natalya makes it for me.”

Father Dobrushin smiled, “You act as though nothing happened to estrange you from anyone else in the world.”

“Because I can’t control what anyone else does.  I can only control what I do or think.  I learned that long before I met the demon.  He just reminded me of it.”

Father Dobrushin couldn’t say anything after that.  He ordered then both lunch and tea.

The most revealing conversations are many times those that have little to do with the here and now within a novel.  This little scene in the luncheon room is this type of scene.  You must take into account that this is pure chapter setting and scene setting.  The purpose of this scene is to propel the chapter and to move the theme of the novel.  So let's look at the elements of the scene and the chapter setting.

First, the scene is set by comparison.  I don't need to go into great detail on the scene setting--that is narrative description, because I use a direct comparison between the place and Aksinya herself.  She is the focus of the chapter and the novel.  She gets the billing and she is the comparison here.  I describe her clothing and appearance and that is the comparison.  You can see the room and setting through this.  That is the purpose and it is a dual purpose: first, you see Aksinya and second, you see the scene.  I do give you a third for free--Father Dobrushin's appearance.

Father Dobrushin is all business.  He simply instructs Aksinya to sit and explains why the judge sent her to the luncheon room.  We know there is much more to this, but it does not need to be said.  By the way, you know Aksinya is not grand standing.  She is serious, but Father Dobrushin is too.  Aksinya is just too unsophisticated to understand what is going on.  I also use this to remind you of the reporters and to move to the point I want to make in this scene.  This is the question of Aksinya's redemption.

In this scene, I use very specific vocabulary to make a point about the entire chapter.  The point is that Father Dobrushin is going to save Aksinya.  The bills were paid by Father Dobrushin.  We guessed this--I wanted to make sure it was certain in your mind.  Aksinya has nothing to offer, but still Father Dobrushin has given his wealth, expertise, and...we shall see for Aksinya.

Father Dobrushin deflects Aksinya's question about why he would do these things for her.  His statement: “Right now, I want you to eat something nice and have tea the way you like it.”  Allows me to bring up Natalya.  Natalya is an important question and part of this chapter--remember chapter setting.

Father Dobrushin's question is one of forgiveness and acceptance.  Aksinya has accepted everything in stride.  It is not that she doesn't care about it, the point is that she has accepted her lot and is ready to accept any punishment.  She believes she deserves great punishment and wants to be punished.

Aksinya's response is an important one.  It is absolutely true and a great truth: “Because I can’t control what anyone else does.  I can only control what I do or think.  I learned that long before I met the demon.  He just reminded me of it.”   With this statement, we know Aksinya was wise, but she has reached a point where her wisdom could be a force for goodness instead of evil.  That is the ultimate point--she has been and is about to be redeemed.  Tomorrow, the trial continues.

A New Novel, Part 272 You May Dine There

3 July 2011, A New Novel, Part 272 You May Dine There 

For those who haven’t been following this blog, let me introduce it a little. I am currently blogging my 21st novel that has the working title Daemon. The novel is about Aksinya, a sorceress, who, to save her family from the Bolsheviks, called and contracted the demon, Asmodeus. Her family was murdered anyway, and she fled with the demon from Russia to Austria.

Aksinya is on trial in Wien, Austria.  The presiding judge found Aksinya not guilty of the fraud charges against her.  He did so because her debt had already been paid.  The judge then released the court for lunch...

“Therefore, I release this Schöffengericht for luncheon.  At one we shall begin with the assault and battery charges.  Sergeant Nagel, there is no reason to return the Princess to her cell.”  Judge Richter stood and the other judges followed him out their respective doors.  The courtroom began to empty.  A clump of reporters stood at the back and waited for Father Dobrushin and Aksinya to walk out the main door.

A policeman conferred with Sergeant Nagel, and the Sergeant motioned to Father Dobrushin, “Sir, you may follow me to the private luncheon room in the Rathaus.  Judge Richter instructed me that you should dine there.”

“Thank you.”  Aksinya and Father Dobrushin followed the Sergeant out the side door of the courtroom

Okay, I should have given you this yesterday.  I wasn't managing my pieces as well as I should.  This is a transition.  I left it at the end of the chapter.  By the way, I broke the chapter at this point only because it was convenient.  This trial chapter is already 28 pages, and I like 20 pages in a chapter--I know that is arbitrary, but it seems to me to be a good length for reading and for a chapter.

You have seen the trail up to this point.  The judge found Aksinya not guilty of fraud and dismissed the charges against her.  He also left open the opportunity for her to file counter charges for the return of her goods and money.

The judge is obviously taken with Aksinya.  She has changed and is an engaging person.  Before, she was not very likable, now her knowledge mixed with her lack of sophistication in some areas makes her seem very pleasant.  The judge tells Father Dobrushin that they may eat in the dining room in the Rathaus.  This is a great privilege.  The judge is protecting her from the reporters and from being returned to her cell.  He doesn't think she will run away, and he doesn't think she is dangerous. 

At the end of the chapter, we have a natural transition out of the courtroom.  The destination is the dining room.  Tomorrow, scene setting for chapter 20.

A New Novel, Part 271 The Charges Related to Theft are Dismissed and Absolved

2 July 2011, A New Novel, Part 271 The Charges Related to Theft are Dismissed and Absolved 

For those who haven’t been following this blog, let me introduce it a little. I am currently blogging my 21st novel that has the working title Daemon. The novel is about Aksinya, a sorceress, who, to save her family from the Bolsheviks, called and contracted the demon, Asmodeus. Her family was murdered anyway, and she fled with the demon from Russia to Austria.

Aksinya is on trial in Wien, Austria.  The presiding judge decided to try Aksinya's fraud case first. We find that all of Aksinya's bills have been paid.  Father Dobrushin wishes to question the witnesses further...

Father Dobrushin put up his hand, “Presiding Judge, before you release the witnesses, I’d like to ask each a single question.”

“I see no reason why not.  You may begin with Herr Frump.”

Father Dobrushin stepped up to the bench, “Herr Frump, did you contract with the Countess or with someone else.”

“I contracted with Anatov Aznabaev.  He said he represented the Countess.” 

“So your claims were really against Anatov Aznabaev and never against the Countess, yet you accepted the Countess’ goods against the debt of Anatov Aznabaev.”

Herr Furmp’s merchant smile slipped into a frown, “I didn’t think I would be on trial here.  My claims were paid.”

Father Dobrushin turned toward the Judge, “Yet, Your Honor, the claims were most properly against Anatov Aznabaev.  Why should the Princess Aksinya not have an equal share in the claims against this man?  It seems to me that these claimants have all been made whole, but she has born the entire burden of a debt that she did not cause.”

Aksinya spoke very clearly, “Although I did not know Herr Frump, I did benefit from his business.  I ate his very fine beef and blessed his meats at my table every night.  I do not wish to make any claim against him or his business.”

Herr Frump stood at the witness chair and bowed deeply, “God bless your words, Dear Lady.  I felt myself lucky to balance my books after such an incident.  I am more than blessed by hearing you disburse me of any guilt as well.”

Father Dobrushin drew his hand across his face, “That is not the outcome I desired or expected.”

Judge Richter laughed and the rest of the court broke into mirth.  The judge held up his hand, “I do under my authority as the presiding judge of this Schöffengericht pronounce all the charges related to theft dismissed and absolved.  I will state in the official records that they were brought wrongly and with prejudice.  This will be presented to all the claimants along with a potential petition to be used by the Princess in any civil litigation against them.  She shall be able to claim in civil trial any difference between her benefit and what she was forced to pay.  I shall leave the details to her representative, Herr Lopuhin.  Herr Lopuhin, will that please you?”

“That pleases the defense.”

“Prosecutor?”

“The prosecution agrees with the judge’s assessment.”

“Therefore, I release this Schöffengericht for luncheon.  At one we shall begin with the assault and battery charges.  Sergeant Nagel, there is no reason to return the Princess to her cell.”

Father Dobrushin is a good defender and a good lawyer.  He brings up a very important point--this is also a metaphor within the context of the novel.  The question is simple--it is one of contracts.  Who did you contract with?  The answer is not Aksinya.  The point is that the claimants accepted money from Aksinya even though it wasn't her debt.  The debt was the demon's and not Aksinya's.  On the other hand, as Aksinya noted, she accepted the meat at her table and even blessed it.  There is another important point her.  Father Dobrushin (we will shortly find) paid off Aksinya's debt.  Therefore, he paid a debt that was never his.  This was a gift to Aksinya.  If you aren't getting this metaphor, there is no need to go further.

The metaphor goes one step further--Aksinya forgives any debt Herr Frump might have against her--and Father Dobrushin.  She forgive his debt as well.  Listen to Herr Frump's words: "I am more than blessed by hearing you disburse me of any guilt as well.”

This is indeed not the outcome Father Dobrushin wished.  He wanted to get back something for Aksinya.  He is defending and protecting Aksinya.

The judge notes there are no longer any charges in relation to fraud against Aksinya.  The books are cleared and the only charge against her is that of assault and battery against Natalya.  The judge goes further and gives Aksinya the right to make a counter claim against her accusers.  Then he releases them to lunch.  Tomorrow, luncheon.

A New Novel, Part 270 I Have No Current Claim Against the Countess

1 July 2011, A New Novel, Part 270 I Have No Current Claim Against the Countess 

For those who haven’t been following this blog, let me introduce it a little. I am currently blogging my 21st novel that has the working title Daemon. The novel is about Aksinya, a sorceress, who, to save her family from the Bolsheviks, called and contracted the demon, Asmodeus. Her family was murdered anyway, and she fled with the demon from Russia to Austria.

Aksinya is on trial in Wien, Austria.  The presiding judge decided to try Aksinya's fraud case first.  He Noe calls the next witness...

Judge Richter pursed his lips and looked down the witness list, “Bring in the next witness.  That is Herr Frump.  He holds the next greatest claim against the defendant.”

Herr Frump entered the courtroom and took the witness chair.  He was a jovial man with a little too much weight.  He wore a stained apron under his suit coat and held his butcher’s hat in his hands.

The Judge began at a little faster clip that before, “Herr Frump, please give us your full name and occupation.”

Herr Frump grinned, “I am Vladimir Frump, a butcher for the Sacré Coeur district in Wien.  But I am not certain why I am here, Your Honor.”

“Why is that Herr Frump?”

“I have no current claim against the Countess.”

“How is that?”

“After the courts disbursement from the sale of goods in the house, a priest came by my shop and settled the bill.”

Judge Richter pawed through the papers before him.  He turned to the junior Lay Judge, “Lay Judge Amsel, are any of the monetary claims against the defendant still outstanding?”

“No, Judge Richter, they have all been settled.”

Judge Richter laid down his papers, “In that case, there can be no criminal liability against Princess Aksinya.  Therefore, is there any reason to continue to question these witnesses?  Prosecutor?  Defense?”

Father Dobrushin put up his hand, “Presiding Judge, before you release the witnesses, I’d like to ask each a single question.”

The next witness is the butcher, Herr Frump.  I give you a short description of him that almost immediately shows you that he is a butcher.  I don't need to tell you he wears a butcher's hat, but for clarity, I do tell you that.

We find that Herr Frump has the next greatest claim.  There was a lot of meat in Aksinya's house and meat is very expensive in war torn Austria.  Herr Frump begins with the fact that he has no claim against Aksinya.  A priest came to Herr Frump and paid off the remainder of Aksinya's debt.  Who might that priest be?  This information makes the judge look through the rest of his papers.  Do you see how this situation was created.  I give you a revelation through conversation and through the events within the courtroom.  I don't tell you about any of it--I show it all to you.

Because there is no longer any claim against Aksinya's accounts, there is no criminal liability--her debts were paid by a priest.  Now, you can guess who paid off Aksinya's debts, to metaphor is perfect to this point.  Without Aksinya asking, all her physical debts were paid.  We guess that we know who did it too.  The end is that Aksinya is not guilty of fraud if the bills are all paid.  The judge prepares to end this part of the trial, but Father Dobrushin has another point he wishes to make.

A New Novel, Part 269 Where is Anatov Aznabaev?

30 June 2011, A New Novel, Part 269 Where is Anatov Aznabaev?

For those who haven’t been following this blog, let me introduce it a little. I am currently blogging my 21st novel that has the working title Daemon. The novel is about Aksinya, a sorceress, who, to save her family from the Bolsheviks, called and contracted the demon, Asmodeus. Her family was murdered anyway, and she fled with the demon from Russia to Austria.

Aksinya is on trial in Wien, Austria.  The presiding judge decided to try Aksinya's fraud case first.  He has called for the first witness, Herr Tauber.  Herr Tauber has just testified that Anatov Aznabaev contracted the house in Aksinya's name...

Judge Richter made a sign with his finger, “Captain Gerber, you have my permission to leave the court and alert your force to apprehend this man Anatov Aznabaev.  If at all possible, I wish him as a witness.  In any case, I want him arrested for fraud.”  Captain Gerber stepped to the bench and Judge Richter handed him an official paper with the judge’s seal on it.

Aksinya spoke, “It will do you no good.”

Captain Gerber paused.  Judge Richter paused, “What will do no good, Princess?”

“Anatov Aznabaev is the name my demon, Asmodeus, uses.  Because he is a demon, he will be impossible for you to find.”

Judge Richter smiled, “Let us try, Princess.  That will keep all things in good order for my court.”  Captain Gerber conferred with the judge for a moment.  Judge Richter raised his head, “Herr Tauber, do you have any idea where Anatov Aznabaev may be found?”

“Herr Tauber shook his head, “I thought he lived at the house I sold.  It is empty now.”

Captain Gerber nodded and exited the courtroom.

Judge Richter glanced back at his notes, “Herr Tauber, was the house damaged?”

“No.”

“You have it back in the same condition you delivered it?”

“Yes, but I lost three months interest…”

“I see that is your claim.”  The judge glanced to the left, “Prosecutor Trauen, do you wish to question the witness?”

“No, Your Honor.”

“Herr Lopuhin?”

Father Dobrushin jumped up.  He spoke quickly, “Herr Tauber, the Countess had the use of your house for less than three months, but you had a surety of earnest money that is greater than the interest and you received the house back without loss.  As far as I can tell you came out positive in this venture.  What actual claims remain that you wish to make against the Countess?  It seems to me, that you owe her money.”

“But the contract…”

“Herr Tauber, this is a criminal court.  The question is one of theft.  It appears to me, that the Countess did not legally make a contract with you.  That rather your contract was with this person Anatov Aznabaev.  In any case, you should return the surety and be paid the interest.  How much would you then owe the Countess?”

Herr Tauber’s lips quivered, “I suppose a thousand Marks.”

“There is no indication of theft here at all, that is theft by the Countess from you, rather you have potentially conducted a theft from the Countess.  If I were her, I would sue you in civil court and ask that you be tired for criminal theft.”

Prosecutor Trauen stood, “I object to the questioning of the witness.”

Judge Richter seemed surprised, “I’m not certain Herr Lopuhin is not correct.  This is a criminal trial against the Princess, but the actions of Herr Tauber are close to criminal and civil fraud.  It does not seem to me that there is any indication of theft, in this case, by the Princess.  Herr Tauber, you are dismissed.”

The house owner stood on shaking legs.  He bowed to the Princess and exited the courtroom.

At this point, the trail seems to move slightly in Aksinya's favor.  First, the judge sends Captain Gerber to arrest Anatov Aznabaev--you remember the good Captain.  He was sent to arrest Aksinya in the first place.  Of course, they will not find Aznabaev--he is a demon.  Aksinya tells them, but they don't believe her.  It is evident that the judge has determined that Aksinya is not wholly guilty of fraud.

Second, we find that Aksinya's house was returned in the same condition it was received.  A loan had been taken out on it.  The judge makes this point.  We also find out that the claim of Herr Tauber is the loss of interest.  The prosecutor has no questions--the point about the use of the house has been made.

Third, who made the contract and who is responsible?  Father Dobrushin has many questions about this.  The main one is the surety versus the interest.  In a contract, a surety is paid and if the owner defaults, the surety goes to the holder of the loan.  Technically, the one who takes out the loan must pay all if they default.  If Aksinya didn't make the contract, then she does not owe the surety or the interest.  The claim of interest against her would be frivolous.  Father Dobrushin is pointing this out.  The judge pulls the points together that Aznabaev is the one who is guilty and owes the surety and the interest and not Aksinya.

This is also a metaphor for the demon's contract with Aksinya.  Aksinya gave a surety and the demon gave a surety.  The question of default is similar to the question of default on the house.  Aksinya's contract was not for her soul.  Her soul now belongs to someone else, and she is no longer free to release it.

Tomorrow, more questioning.